旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the response more natural and concise, correct pronoun/number errors, and keep to a clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “and” or “so”). Avoid adding unrelated details like stopping at a cafe unless it links directly to looking out the window.

示例: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by car or bus because I enjoy seeing new landscapes. For example, I like spotting mountains and small villages along the route, and this helps me appreciate the region’s geography.

建议: Reduce repetition and fix grammar (e.g., plural forms and gerunds). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example and a brief reason. Use linking words like “especially” and “because.”

示例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially at sunset, because the light makes the views more dramatic. For instance, I have several pictures of mountain silhouettes and colorful skies from recent trips.

建议: Give a direct answer first, then add one or two specific supporting reasons. Remove filler words (uh) and repeated words. Use cohesive phrasing like “because” and give a concise example to support your preference.

示例: I prefer the sea because walking on the beach helps me relax. For example, I like listening to the waves and watching seabirds, which makes me feel calm and refreshed.

× Yes, I always look out their windows during traveling by car or bus.

✓ Yes, I always look out the window when traveling by car or bus.

The student used the plural possessive pronoun 'their' incorrectly for their own action; use 'the window' or 'my window'. Also 'during traveling' is nonstandard; use 'when traveling'. Use 'the window' as a generic reference to the vehicle window. Suggestion: replace 'their windows' with 'the window' or 'my window' and use 'when traveling'.

× It is one of my favorite part of the road trip.

✓ It is one of my favorite parts of a road trip.

The noun phrase 'one of my favorite' must be followed by a plural noun 'parts'. Also 'the road trip' is less natural than 'a road trip' in this general statement. Suggestion: change 'part' to 'parts' and use 'a road trip'.

× I can explore the geography and landscape of different areas and mountains.

✓ I can explore the geography and landscapes of different areas and mountains.

This sentence is mostly correct, but 'landscape' should be plural to match 'different areas and mountains' (multiple landscapes). Ensure noun number agreement after 'can'. Suggestion: use 'landscapes'.

× I can also stop by a local cafe to rest.

✓ I can also stop by a local cafe to rest.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Suggestion: none.

× Yes, I have a lot of photos from the sceneries in the car, especially during the sunset.

✓ Yes, I have a lot of photos of the scenery from the car, especially at sunset.

Use 'photos of the scenery' rather than 'photos from the sceneries'; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun. Use 'at sunset' rather than 'during the sunset' for natural expression. Suggestion: use 'scenery' (singular/uncountable) and 'at sunset'.

× It is one of my favorite parts of a journey to taking photos of the sceneries during traveling and and seeing different mountains and landscapes.

✓ It is one of my favorite parts of a journey to take photos while traveling and to see different mountains and landscapes.

Use the infinitive 'to take' not 'to taking'. Remove the duplicate 'and'. Use 'scenery' not 'sceneries' (uncountable) and 'while traveling' is more natural than 'during traveling'. Also parallel structure: 'to take... and to see...'. Suggestion: use infinitives consistently and correct noun forms and remove duplicate words.

× I want to choose between mountains and the seas.

✓ I want to choose between the mountains and the sea.

When presenting two options, use consistent singular/plural forms or definite articles: 'the mountains and the sea' is natural. 'Seas' is odd here; use singular 'sea' for the idea of the seaside. Also 'between' should be followed by two comparable noun phrases. Suggestion: use 'the mountains and the sea'.

× I will choose the seas.

✓ I would choose the sea.

The context is a preference question; use conditional or simple present rather than future 'will'. Also use singular 'sea' instead of 'seas'. 'I would choose' or 'I prefer the sea' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'I would choose the sea' or 'I prefer the sea'.

× I enjoy walking on the beach and uh, it helps me relax and I I enjoy seeing the birds chirping on the sea and the waves.

✓ I enjoy walking on the beach; it helps me relax, and I enjoy hearing the birds and watching the waves.

Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'I'. Use 'hearing the birds' rather than 'seeing the birds chirping on the sea' (birds chirp but are heard; 'on the sea' is unnatural — use 'by the sea' or 'at the seaside'). Use 'watching the waves' for clarity. Also combine clauses with appropriate punctuation. Suggestion: avoid fillers and duplication, use 'by the sea' and proper verbs ('hearing', 'watching').

× It's my favorite.

✓ It's my favorite.

This sentence is correct and needs no change. It properly uses the contraction and possessive pronoun. Suggestion: none.