旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and reduce hesitations and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unnecessary comments about buying tickets unless relevant. Focus on fluid pronunciation and correct minor grammar (e.g., “when I’m travelling” not “when I'm traveling by plane, I really like to, even when I'm paying”).

示例: Yes — I always like to sit by the window when I travel. For example, when I take buses or planes I try to choose a window seat so I can watch the countryside and cities pass by, which helps me relax and feel inspired.

建议: Make sentences grammatically correct and use clearer vocabulary. Give specific examples and use linking words (e.g., “for example,” “especially”). Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure (subject-verb agreement, article use).

示例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the window. For example, on long journeys I photograph interesting landscapes, especially at sunrise or sunset because the light makes the colours beautiful and I like to keep those memories.

建议: Give a direct answer and support it with two clear reasons using linking words. Correct word choice and reduce fillers (uh, um). Use precise expressions (e.g., “prefer the sea” not “chase one of them”).

示例: I prefer the sea. Firstly, in summer I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach; secondly, I find the sound and view of the waves very calming, so I like to sit on the coast and watch the sea.

× Yes, I do really and I really enjoy it.

✓ Yes, I really do, and I really enjoy it.

The original word order 'do really' is awkward. Place the adverb 'really' after the auxiliary 'do' for correct emphasis: 'I really do.' This follows normal English adverb placement with auxiliaries.

× So every time I'm traveling by bus or by plane, I really like to, even when I'm paying, I, I, when I'm getting, I'm paying new ticket, I really try to get uh, a place which is near to the window where I can watch, uh, the nature and I really enjoy it.

✓ So every time I'm traveling by bus or plane, even when I'm buying a ticket, I try to get a seat near the window where I can watch the scenery, and I really enjoy it.

Problems: wordiness, repetition, and awkward verb phrases. Use 'buying a ticket' instead of 'paying new ticket' and 'seat' instead of 'place' for clarity. 'Near to the window' should be 'near the window.' 'The nature' is unnatural here; use 'the scenery.' Keep tense consistent (present continuous for travel and present simple for habitual actions).

× Yes, absolutely. I do so even when I'm traveling to the long journey.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I do so even when I'm on a long journey.

Incorrect prepositional phrase 'traveling to the long journey.' Use 'on a long journey' or 'on a long trip.' Keep present continuous 'I'm on' to describe being in the middle of travel.

× So if I see the the nature which really come to my eyes very good.

✓ So if I see scenery that catches my eye,

Awkward structure and incorrect verb agreement: 'nature which really come to my eyes very good' is not idiomatic. Use 'scenery that catches my eye' which is concise and grammatically correct ('catches' agrees with singular 'scenery').

× I really like take a picture and have a memory.

✓ I really like to take a picture to have a memory.

After 'like' you can use either the infinitive 'to take' or the gerund 'taking.' The original missing 'to' is incorrect. Also 'have a memory' is better expressed as 'to keep a memory' or 'to have a memento.'

× So especially when I'm traveling to the sunrise and the time of sunrise and sun downs at that time I really like to take.

✓ Especially at sunrise and sunset when I'm traveling, I really like to take photos.

'Traveling to the sunrise' is incorrect; use 'at sunrise and sunset.' 'Sun downs' is nonstandard; use 'sunset.' Also the sentence lacked an object for 'take' — 'take photos' clarifies meaning and keeps tense consistent.

× I do like both of them, but if I have to chase one of them, I will say see because, uh, especially in the summer, I really like to go in the sea and swim there because, uh, one of the best skills is swimming.

✓ I like both, but if I have to choose one, I would say the sea because especially in summer I like to go into the sea and swim, since swimming is one of my best skills.

Multiple issues: 'chase one of them' should be 'choose one of them' (wrong verb). 'See' is a misspelling of 'sea' in context; ensure correct word. Use 'go into the sea' not 'go in the sea.' 'One of the best skills is swimming' is awkward; rephrase to 'swimming is one of my best skills' for natural word order.

× So on, on that I really like to sit down, uh, near to the coast and watch the sea.

✓ So for that reason, I really like to sit near the coast and watch the sea.

Reduce filler 'on, on that' to 'for that reason.' Use 'sit near the coast' instead of 'sit down near to the coast.' Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'near.' Keep verb forms simple and natural.