旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is natural and relevant, but slightly repetitive and some sentences are fragmented. Make the response more concise, avoid repeating words (e.g., “just”), and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details with linking words.

示例: Yes — I often look out the window when I travel, especially abroad, because I enjoy observing new surroundings. For example, when it’s calm and dark I find the view relaxing and it helps me unwind after a busy day.

建议: Good content and relevant reasons, but slightly wordy and use of 'your' sounds generic. Make it more personal and concise, and use a linking phrase to connect reasons (e.g., 'because' and 'so').

示例: Yes, I often photograph scenery from the window because I want to capture memorable landscapes while travelling. I usually share the best photos with my family and friends, and sometimes post a few on social media.

建议: Your answer is personal and descriptive, but several short repeated phrases (playing in the water, playing sand) and tense/style could be smoother. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific, well-linked reasons with concise phrasing.

示例: I prefer the sea. Ever since childhood I’ve loved playing in the water and on the sand, and I still enjoy beach volleyball with my siblings. I also hope to learn to surf one day, which is another reason I love coastal trips.

× I just really enjoy looking out the window and just observe the new surroundings.

✓ I just really enjoy looking out the window and just observing the new surroundings.

Parallel structure requires matching verb forms after 'enjoy'. 'Enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (-ing), so 'observe' must become 'observing'. Use of parallel -ing forms makes the sentence grammatically consistent and natural. Suggestion: Keep verbs after 'enjoy' in the gerund form (e.g., 'enjoy doing something').

× It feels really good to share it with your friends or family or even social media.

✓ It feels really good to share it with my friends or family or even on social media.

Pronoun 'your' is inconsistent with the speaker 'I' in the context; first person 'my' should be used. Also 'social media' is a platform, so include preposition 'on' for correct collocation: 'on social media'. Suggestion: Match pronouns to the speaker and use correct prepositions with nouns like 'social media'.

× I would prefer going to the sea because since I was a child, I'd always enjoy playing in the water, playing sand, playing volleyball with my siblings, and I always had this dream that I could be good at surfing one day.

✓ I prefer going to the sea because since I was a child, I have always enjoyed playing in the water, building sandcastles, and playing volleyball with my siblings, and I have always had this dream that I could be good at surfing one day.

'Would prefer' is odd when stating a general preference; simple present 'prefer' is better. Tense inconsistency: 'since I was a child' requires present perfect ('have always enjoyed/have always had') to connect past to present. 'Playing sand' is incorrect collocation; use 'building sandcastles' or 'playing in the sand'. Also replace 'I'd always enjoy' (would + base) with 'I have always enjoyed' to express continuous experience. Suggestion: Use present simple for general preferences, and present perfect when referring to actions continuing from the past to present; use correct collocations for activities.