旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more fluent and coherent: give a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and incomplete phrases. For example, say why you enjoy looking out (people-watching, changing weather) and mention when or how often you do it. Keep it to 2–4 concise sentences.

示例: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel. I enjoy watching people and seeing how the weather and landscape change, because it makes the journey more interesting. For example, on my commute I often notice street markets and seasonal trees, which helps me feel connected to the places I pass.

建议: Improve clarity and grammar: state your main idea, then give clear reasons and a short example. Use correct verb forms and linking words (because, so, therefore). Also correct misused words (e.g., 'stop' instead of 'stove') and avoid repeating mistakes. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

示例: No, I usually don't take photos while the car is moving because it is unsafe and the photos often turn out blurry. Instead, I wait until we stop at a scenic spot so I can take clear pictures safely.

建议: Give a direct answer followed by specific reasons and one short example. Reduce hesitation and fix grammar (singular/plural, word order). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to organize your response. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer the mountains because I love trekking and hiking. For example, my husband and I often go on weekend hikes in nearby ranges, which I find refreshing and good exercise.

× Yes, I always look outside because there are.

✓ Yes, I always look outside because there is a lot to see.

The student used 'there are' without a following plural noun. Use 'there is' with 'a lot' (singular expression) or 'there are' followed by a plural noun. Suggestion: say 'there is a lot to see' or 'there are many things to see.'

× I enjoy when I see other people and weather and other outside, yeah.

✓ I enjoy seeing other people, the weather, and other things outside.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (verb+ing), not 'when I see'. The list 'other people and weather and other outside' is ungrammatical and needs nouns; use 'the weather' and 'other things outside.' Suggestion: use gerund after 'enjoy' and make a parallel list.

× No, I usually don't take photo while I'm moving car because it is unsafe.

✓ No, I usually don't take photos while I'm in a moving car because it is unsafe.

'Take' followed by 'photo' requires plural 'photos' for general statements. 'While I'm moving car' is missing preposition/article; use 'in a moving car.' Also present progressive 'I'm in a moving car' is correct. Suggestion: use plural 'photos' and include 'in a' before 'moving car.'

× The picture often turn on blurry.

✓ The pictures often turn out blurry.

Subject 'picture(s)' and verb must agree: use 'pictures...turn out' or 'the picture often turns out.' 'Turn on' is incorrect in this context; the correct phrasal verb is 'turn out' meaning result. Suggestion: use 'turn out blurry' and match singular/plural.

× Instead I wait until the stove somewhere scenic and they take clear photo with my.

✓ Instead, I wait until we stop somewhere scenic, and then I take clear photos.

This sentence has multiple errors: 'stove' is incorrect word — should be 'stop'; 'they take clear photo with my' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'we stop somewhere scenic' and 'I take clear photos.' Also include comma and 'then' for sequence. Suggestion: use correct verb 'stop' and first-person singular 'I take photos.'

× Yeah, I like mount mountains because I I I love trekking so and hiking my favorite.

✓ Yeah, I like mountains because I love trekking and hiking; they are my favorite activities.

'Mount mountains' is wrong; use 'mountains.' Repetition 'I I I' is a speech disfluency and should be removed in writing. 'Hiking my favorite' lacks verb; say 'they are my favorite activities.' Suggestion: remove repetitions, correct noun 'mountains,' and provide a complete predicate for 'favorite.'

× Me and my husband always go for trekking, so I like mountain.

✓ My husband and I always go trekking, so I like mountains.

Use subject pronoun order 'My husband and I' rather than 'Me and my husband.' Use 'go trekking' (no 'for') and plural 'mountains' to match general preference. Suggestion: use subject pronouns in correct order, correct verb phrase, and plural noun for general statements.