旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and small hesitations. Use linking words like “for example” or “such as” correctly and keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel. I used to travel a lot with my father as a child, so watching the landscape became my favorite part of the trip; for example, I remember seeing countryside scenes in Belgium, Germany and France.

建议: Make your opinion clear and give a concrete reason. Reduce hesitations and correct small grammar errors (e.g., “I don't like taking photos” or “photos are not very good”). Use one linking word (because/so) to connect reason and opinion.

示例: I enjoy photography while traveling, but I usually avoid taking photos out of the car window because the pictures often turn out blurry or distorted. Therefore, I prefer to stop and take photos when I can get a clear view.

建议: Give a direct preference or offer a balanced comparison. Reduce filler words and hesitation. Provide one specific reason for each choice and conclude with a short summary sentence (preference or tie). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I find it hard to choose because I love both. I grew up in a mountain town and enjoy hiking and the fresh air, but I also enjoy the sea for swimming and diving. If I had to choose, I would pick the mountains for everyday life and the sea for holidays.

× Of course I like, I traveled a lot with my father when I was a child and it was my favorite thing that I that I liked.

✓ Of course I did; I traveled a lot with my father when I was a child and it was my favorite thing.

The sentence mixes present 'I like' with past events. Use past tense 'did' for a general affirmative response about past habits and keep verbs consistent: 'traveled' and 'was' are past. Remove redundant 'that I liked'. Improve fluency by separating response ('Of course I did').

× I saw a lot of countries through the window, for example, Belgium, Germany or France.

✓ I saw many countries through the window, for example Belgium, Germany, and France.

'A lot of' is acceptable but 'many' is more natural here; 'or' is incorrect when listing examples—use 'and'. Also remove unnecessary comma before country list. Maintain plural agreement with 'countries' which is correct.

× I like taking photos and while traveling, but I don't like take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I think photos are not so, well, not so exactly good.

✓ I like taking photos while traveling, but I don't like taking photos of the scenery outside the car window because I don't think those photos turn out very well.

After 'don't like' use the -ing form: 'taking' not 'take'. Remove the extra 'and' and place 'while traveling' after 'taking photos' for clarity. 'Not so exactly good' is ungrammatical; use natural phrasing 'don't turn out very well'.

× It's a difficult question for me because I like mountains a lot.

✓ It's a difficult question for me because I like the mountains a lot.

When speaking generally about a specific known type of landscape (mountain regions) English often uses 'the' before plural geographic features: 'the mountains'. Without context 'mountains' can be fine, but 'the mountains' is more natural here considering the following sentence about being born between huge mountains.

× My, I was born, uh, in a small city between huge mountains, but I like sea too.

✓ I was born in a small city between huge mountains, but I also like the sea.

Remove disfluencies ('My, uh') and reorder for natural English. Use 'also' for 'too' placed after verb or before complement. Use article 'the' with 'sea' when referring to the general seaside experience.

× I like uh, diving a lot and swimming and I don't know, I don't know what I.

✓ I like diving and swimming a lot, and I don't know which I prefer.

Remove filler 'uh' and combine activities smoothly. The original ends abruptly; complete the thought with 'which I prefer' to express indecision. Maintain parallel structure and clarity.