旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is natural and relevant, but a bit repetitive ("I like to watch" used twice) and could be tightened with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Also try to vary vocabulary (e.g., "observe" or "admire" instead of repeating "watch").

示例: I usually choose a window seat when I travel during the day because I enjoy observing the landscape. For example, I often take photos of interesting buildings or farmland, and I like to see how people go about their daily activities while I pass through towns.

建议: Good direct response with reasons, but the answer is slightly disjointed. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so") to connect ideas and add one specific example to illustrate the blurriness issue. Keep it concise and avoid contradicting statements.

示例: I only take photos when I see a sunrise or sunset because those colours look special. Otherwise I usually record videos instead, since photos taken from a moving car often turn out blurry—for instance, a quick photo of a passing bridge once became indistinct, so video captures it better.

建议: Nice comparison and clear preferences. Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement and word forms: "offer" not "offers", "adventure" instead of "adventurous") and use one linking word to contrast (e.g., "however"). Add a brief personal example to make it more specific. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Both are wonderful, but I prefer the sea for relaxation and the mountains for excitement. For example, sitting by the seaside and listening to the waves helps me unwind, whereas hiking a mountain gives me a strong sense of adventure and achievement.

× When I am traveling during daytime, I prefer to sit by the window because I get the chance to take a photo or video of the scenery.

✓ When I travel during the daytime, I prefer to sit by the window because I get the chance to take photos or videos of the scenery.

Use simple present tense 'travel' for habitual actions instead of present continuous 'am traveling'. Also 'daytime' usually takes the article 'the'. Use plural 'photos or videos' to match general reference to taking more than one; this fits quantifier usage and sounds natural.

× I like to watch the scenic views of some places and I like to watch the different activities people are doing.

✓ I like watching scenic views of places and observing the different activities people do.

Use the gerund form 'watching' and 'observing' to express general preferences. Replace 'are doing' with simple present 'do' to describe habitual actions. 'Of some places' is awkward; 'of places' is more natural.

× I take photos of sunrise or sunset, otherwise I don't take photos at all.

✓ I take photos of sunrises or sunsets; otherwise I don't take photos at all.

Use plural 'sunrises' and 'sunsets' when talking generally. A semicolon or conjunction improves sentence flow. Tense is simple present for habitual action, which is correct; only number and punctuation adjusted.

× I enjoy watching this scenery but when I start to take photos it's very blurry so it's not that good.

✓ I enjoy watching the scenery, but when I start to take photos they often turn out blurry, so they are not very good.

'This scenery' should be 'the scenery' for general reference. The sentence lacked a clear subject for 'it's very blurry'—use 'they' referring to photos. 'Turn out' is a natural collocation. Added commas and conjunctions to improve structure.

× I prefer taking videos instead.

✓ I prefer to take videos instead.

Both 'prefer taking' and 'prefer to take' are possible; 'prefer to take videos' fits parallel structure with earlier 'prefer to sit' and sounds more formal for test responses.

× The mountains and the sea offers different feelings.

✓ The mountains and the sea offer different feelings.

Subject is compound plural ('mountains and sea'), so verb should be plural 'offer' not 'offers'.

× Sitting by the seaside while listening to the sound of the waves crashing each other, you feel calmness and peace.

✓ Sitting by the seaside and listening to the sound of waves crashing, you feel calm and peaceful.

Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'waves' for general reference and avoid 'crashing each other' which is redundant; waves crash, not each other. Use adjective 'calm' and 'peaceful' instead of noun 'calmness' for parallelism with 'peaceful'.

× But when you see the mountains or when you climb the mountains, it offers a sense of adventurous.

✓ But when you see or climb the mountains, they offer a sense of adventure.

'Mountains' is plural, so use 'they offer' not 'it offers'. Use noun 'adventure' not adjective 'adventurous'. Combine clauses for conciseness.