旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms and word order, avoid repetition, and keep answer concise (max 3–4 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and an example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" correctly.

示例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel because it helps reduce my motion sickness. For example, whenever I travel abroad I focus on the distant scenery, which makes me feel less nauseous. This simple habit often allows me to travel more comfortably.

建议: Correct tense and phrasing, and make sentences shorter and clearer. State your main point first, then explain safety reasons and give a brief example. Use linking words like "because" and "so" properly and keep verb tenses consistent.

示例: Usually I don't take photos from a moving car because it is dangerous. If I want a good picture, I ask my mom to stop the car and then we get out to take photos safely.

建议: Fix sentence structure and vocabulary, and be specific about reasons. Begin with a clear statement of preference, then give one or two concise reasons using correct adjectives and grammar. Avoid redundant phrases.

示例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the cool, fresh air and peaceful atmosphere. For instance, I like hiking in mountainous areas where the temperature is cooler and the views are relaxing.

× Yes I do because look king out of the window when on board can reduce motion sickness that I always have.

✓ Yes, I do because looking out of the window when on board can reduce the motion sickness that I often get.

The verb phrase 'look king' is incorrect; use the gerund 'looking' after 'because' as a noun phrase subject. Also add comma and article 'the' before 'motion sickness' and replace 'always have' with 'often get' for natural English. Suggestion: Use the gerund form for actions functioning as subjects or objects, and choose appropriate frequency verbs (often/get).

× For instance when I was travelling in foreign countries I always have motion sickness so I look out the window to.

✓ For instance, when I travel in foreign countries I always get motion sickness, so I look out of the window.

Tense and verb choice: use present tense 'travel' for habitual actions and 'get' for experiencing sickness. 'Look out the window to' is ungrammatical; use 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window'. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions and correct verb collocations ('get motion sickness').

× Usually I don't take photos I'll off the window of the cars because I am aware of the accident that can occur when I was out of the window.

✓ Usually I don't take photos out of the car window because I am aware of accidents that can occur if I lean out of the window.

Multiple errors: 'I'll off the window of the cars' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'out of the car window'. The clause 'when I was out of the window' mixes tenses and is ungrammatical; use conditional 'if I lean out'. 'Accident' should be plural 'accidents' for general statement. Suggestion: Keep consistent present tense for habitual statements and use conditional clauses correctly (if + present).

× So when I want to take a photo, I told my mom to park and go outside for the picture.

✓ So when I want to take a photo, I ask my mom to park and go outside for the picture.

Tense mismatch: 'want' is present while 'told' is past. Use present 'ask' to match habitual or general present situations. 'Tell' could be past if referring to a single past event, but context implies habitual preference. Suggestion: Keep tenses consistent within the sentence; use present simple for habitual actions ('ask').

× Lately from my experience, I would say I prefer seeing a mountain would be nice for me because mountain Gibbs cold weather which I really like it.

✓ Recently, from my experience, I would say I prefer seeing mountains because mountains give cold weather, which I really like.

Several issues: 'Lately' and phrase ordering improved to 'Recently.' 'I prefer seeing a mountain would be nice for me' is ungrammatical; use 'I prefer seeing mountains' or 'I prefer the mountains.' 'Gibbs' is incorrect; intended verb is 'give' or 'have'—use 'mountains have cold weather' or 'mountains give cold weather.' Remove redundant pronoun 'it' after the clause. Suggestion: Use clear noun forms (mountains/the mountains), correct verb 'have/give', and avoid redundant pronouns. Use consistent tense and natural collocations ('prefer the mountains').