旅行— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
考生
I like look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus, Uh, I often imagine my future self such as become a rich and uh.
考官
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
考生
I should say no because I don't have talent to take a photos of scenery outside the car window.
考官
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
考生
I prefer the sea rather than mountains because hiking the mountain is hard to me.
评估
总分
Part 1
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
分数: 62.0建议: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법과 발음 오류가 보입니다. 주어와 동사의 형태를 정확히 하고 불필요한 감탄사(uh)를 줄이세요. 질문에 직접 답한 뒤 이유나 구체적 예를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이되 연결어(for example, because, so 등)를 사용해 논리적으로 만드세요. 예: 주어+동사 형태를 정확히 사용하고 'imagine my future self' 뒤에 구체적 상황을 덧붙이세요.
示例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy watching the changing scenery. For example, I like to imagine my future self in different cities and think about how my life might be different there.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
分数: 68.0建议: 의미는 전달되지만 문법(관사, 동사 형태)과 표현이 어색합니다. 'I should say no' 대신 간단한 부정문을 사용하고 'talent' 대신 'good at'을 쓰는 것이 자연스럽습니다. 이유를 덧붙이거나 대체 행동(예: enjoy watching instead)도 말해 보세요.
示例: No, I usually don't take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I'm not good at photography. Instead, I prefer to just enjoy the view and remember it in my mind.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
分数: 70.0建议: 대답은 명확하지만 어순과 표현(‘rather than’, ‘hard to me’)이 어색합니다. 비교 표현은 'prefer the sea to the mountains'가 자연스럽고, 이유는 'because hiking in the mountains is difficult for me'처럼 표현하세요. 추가로 구체적 예시를 하나 들면 더 좋습니다.
示例: I prefer the sea to the mountains because hiking in the mountains is difficult for me. For example, I enjoy relaxing on the beach and swimming rather than climbing steep trails.
语法
× I like look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus, Uh, I often imagine my future self such as become a rich and uh.
✓ I like looking out of the window at the scenery when travelling by bus. I often imagine my future self, such as becoming rich.
The verb 'like' should be followed by the -ing form 'looking' (Grammar Problem Type 8). Also use the preposition 'out of' for looking from inside a vehicle and 'become' should be in the -ing form 'becoming' after expressions like 'imagine my future self' (verb + -ing). Combine into two clear sentences and remove fillers. Suggestions: use 'like looking' not 'like look', use 'looking out of the window', and use 'becoming' after 'imagine'.
× I should say no because I don't have talent to take a photos of scenery outside the car window.
✓ I should say no because I don't have the talent to take photos of the scenery outside the car window.
This sentence has article and plural issues (Grammar Problem Type 22 and 1). 'Talent' as a noun often requires the definite article 'the' when speaking about a particular ability. 'A photos' is incorrect because 'photos' is plural; use 'a photo' or 'photos' without 'a'. Also include 'the' before 'scenery' to refer to the specific view. Suggestion: choose singular or plural consistently and add 'the' where referring to a specific thing: 'the talent', 'take photos', 'the scenery'.
× I prefer the sea rather than mountains because hiking the mountain is hard to me.
✓ I prefer the sea to the mountains because hiking in the mountains is hard for me.
The comparison verb 'prefer' is typically followed by 'to' not 'rather than' when comparing nouns (Grammar Problem Type 26 and 11). Use plural 'the mountains' to match general meaning (Grammar Problem Type 1). The phrase 'hard to me' is unidiomatic; use 'hard for me'. Also use the preposition 'in' with 'hiking in the mountains'. Suggestion: say 'prefer A to B', use plural when speaking generally, and 'hard for me' for expressing difficulty.
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