旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more concise, correct repetitions and tense errors, and add one specific detail about what you notice to make it more vivid. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery constantly changes. For example, I enjoy watching rural fields turn into small towns, which I find interesting and relaxing.

建议: Clarify your reason and avoid irrelevant or confusing information. State a clear topic sentence, give a precise reason, and add a brief example if needed. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., "because someone gets sick" → explain motion sickness).

示例: I usually don’t take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I get motion sickness when I look at my phone camera. For instance, when I tried taking pictures last year I felt dizzy, so now I prefer to just enjoy the view.

建议: Answer directly, correct incomplete phrases and add specific reasons and brief supporting details. Use linking words to connect preferences and reasons, and avoid fragments and hesitations.

示例: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I enjoy hiking and being surrounded by trees and fresh air. Also, I’m not a confident swimmer, so I feel more comfortable and relaxed in mountainous areas.

× Yes, I like looking at the window, at the scenery, because they are changing as as we go.

✓ Yes, I like looking out of the window at the scenery because it changes as we go.

The verb phrase 'like looking' is correct, but preposition and referent are wrong. Use 'looking out of the window' or 'looking out the window' and 'the scenery' is a singular collective noun here, so use 'it changes' rather than 'they are changing'. Remove duplicated word 'as'. Also use simple present 'changes' to describe habitual action. Suggestion: say 'I like looking out of the window at the scenery because it changes as we go.'

× So it was it is interesting for me and makes me relax, makes me feel relaxed.

✓ So it is interesting for me and it makes me feel relaxed.

The sentence mixes past and present ('was' and 'is'). Use simple present 'is' to describe a general habit. Add the subject 'it' before 'makes' for clarity and use 'feel relaxed' once. Also 'makes me relax' is less natural than 'makes me feel relaxed'. Suggestion: 'So it is interesting for me and it makes me feel relaxed.'

× I like watching the scenery outside the car window, but I usually don't take photos of the scenery because I know a person who uh easy to get sick cause sick.

✓ I like watching the scenery outside the car window, but I usually don't take photos of it because I know a person who easily gets sick.

The clause 'who uh easy to get sick cause sick' is ungrammatical. Use the adverb 'easily' and correct verb agreement 'gets' for third person singular. Replace repeated 'the scenery' with 'it' to avoid redundancy. Also remove filler 'cause sick'. Suggestion: '...because I know a person who easily gets sick.'

× So umm, taking photos are not good for me.

✓ So, taking photos is not good for me.

The noun phrase 'taking photos' is a gerund phrase functioning as a singular subject, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. Suggestion: 'Taking photos is not good for me.'

× I prefer the mountains to the sea 'cause I like nature's.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because I like nature.

The term 'nature's' incorrectly uses an apostrophe suggesting possession; the intended noun is 'nature' (uncountable). Also replace informal ''cause' with 'because' for clarity in a test context. Suggestion: 'I prefer the mountains to the sea because I like nature.'

× So, uh, and I also like the. Sing and I don't. I'm not good at swimming so.

✓ I also like singing, but I'm not good at swimming.

The original contains sentence fragments ('I also like the. Sing and I don't.') and filler words. Combine ideas into a full sentence: 'I also like singing' (gerund) and contrast with 'but I'm not good at swimming.' This fixes fragment issues and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: 'I also like singing, but I'm not good at swimming.'