旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief, connected reasons using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and repetition ("gives me a break, gives break"). Use correct verb forms ("when I travel").

示例: Yes — I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax. Moreover, it gives my eyes a break from my phone, and sometimes I spot interesting places or landmarks along the route.

建议: Organise your reply: give a clear topic sentence then two concise supporting details. Remove fillers and repeat phrases. Use precise vocabulary ("landscapes, architecture, roads" instead of "beautiful ways"). Mention purpose briefly (to share or keep memories).

示例: Yes, I often take photos of scenery from the car window. For example, I like capturing landscapes and interesting architecture, and I usually share the best shots with friends and family on social media to keep memories.

建议: Good structure and clear reasons. Improve by tightening language, removing redundant words ("season" repeated), and using a linking phrase to contrast choices. Add one specific detail to strengthen answer (e.g. a favourite activity at each place).

示例: It depends on my mood and the season: in autumn I prefer the mountains for trekking and exploring forest trails, while in summer I enjoy the sea, sitting on the beach and listening to the waves.

× Yes, I look out the window at the scenery when I traveling by bus or car.

✓ Yes, I look out the window at the scenery when I travel by bus or car.

The sentence uses 'I traveling' which is incorrect after 'when' for habitual actions. Use the base form 'travel' for simple present to describe habitual behavior. Suggestion: use 'I travel' for routines and habits.

× It makes me feel relaxed and enjoy the view outside.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed and enjoy the view outside.

Although this sentence is acceptable conversationally, it's clearer to maintain parallel structure: 'makes me feel relaxed and enjoy' pairs 'feel' and 'enjoy' as complements of 'makes'. No grammatical change required; keep as is. (No error from provided list.)

× Uh, also plus it gives me a break, gives break to my eyes from my phone and uh, sometimes I spot the places.

✓ Also, it gives my eyes a break from my phone, and sometimes I spot interesting places.

Redundant conjunctions 'also plus' create clutter; 'gives break to my eyes' is unnatural word order. Reorder to 'gives my eyes a break from my phone' and add a clearer noun 'interesting' for 'places'. Remove filler words for clarity. Use simple present for habitual action.

× Yes, I love to capture beautiful landscapes, uh tall buildings and beautiful ways and my phone while traveling while traveling and umm and then I share those pictures on social media with my friends and family and it uh.

✓ Yes, I love to capture beautiful landscapes, tall buildings, and street scenes on my phone while traveling, and then I share those pictures on social media with my friends and family.

Errors include repetition ('while traveling' twice), awkward phrase 'beautiful ways' (likely 'street scenes'), and run-on structure. Use noun phrases 'street scenes' and place 'on my phone' correctly. Keep 'while traveling' as an -ing clause to indicate simultaneous action, and split into a single clear sentence.

× Well, it depends on my mood or season.

✓ Well, it depends on my mood or the season.

Missing article 'the' before 'season' when referring to a general identifiable period. Use 'the season' or plural 'the seasons' for general statements. Present simple 'depends' is correct.

× In the autumn season I love to go to the mountains for trekking, hiking and many things to explore there.

✓ In autumn I love to go to the mountains for trekking, hiking, and exploring many things there.

'The autumn season' is wordy; 'in autumn' is more natural. Parallel structure: use consistent verb forms ('trekking, hiking, and exploring') rather than 'many things to explore'. Keep simple present for habitual preference.

× And in summer season I just love to sit by the sea and enjoy the view and waves.

✓ And in summer I just love to sit by the sea and enjoy the view and the waves.

Use 'in summer' instead of 'in summer season'. Add 'the' before 'waves' to be natural when referring to specific waves at the sea. Maintain simple present tense for preferences.