旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one supporting detail using a linking word. Correct verb forms and use singular/plural and articles properly (e.g., “I like to look out of the window when I travel by car or bus”). Avoid redundancy (don’t repeat ‘when’ and ‘by’).

示例: I usually look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because the scenery relaxes me. For example, watching trees and fields pass by helps me feel calmer and makes the journey seem shorter.

建议: Improve grammar and vocabulary precision, and use a linking word to explain reason and preference. Correct subject-verb agreement and choose uncountable or plural nouns correctly (e.g., ‘it comes out blurry’ and ‘scenery’ not ‘sceneries’). Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

示例: I usually don’t take photos from a moving car because they often come out blurry. Instead, I prefer watching the scenery, such as rivers and forests, because I enjoy observing details rather than trying to photograph them.

建议: Make the answer grammatically correct and more organized: give a clear topic sentence, then two short supporting reasons using linking words (e.g., ‘when’ and ‘however’). Fix verb forms and article/spelling errors (‘depends’, ‘hike’, ‘sea’). Avoid repetition and keep sentences short and natural.

示例: It depends on my mood: when I want activity, I prefer the mountains because hiking is exciting and good exercise. However, when I want to relax, I prefer the sea because I can sunbathe and spend calm time with friends.

× Yes, I do like to watch windows whenever I traveling on car or by bus because the outgoing sceneries makes me feel relaxed and make the trip shorter.

✓ Yes, I do like to watch out the window whenever I am traveling by car or by bus because the outgoing scenery makes me feel relaxed and makes the trip seem shorter.

Errors: 'traveling' needs auxiliary to form present continuous ('am traveling') and 'whenever I traveling' requires 'am'. 'on car' is wrong preposition; use 'by car'. 'watch windows' is unnatural; use 'watch out the window' or 'look out the window'. 'sceneries' is countable/uncountable confusion; 'scenery' is uncountable. Subject-verb agreement: 'scenery makes' (singular) and 'makes the trip seem shorter' needs 'makes' for subject 'scenery'. Suggestions: use present continuous with correct auxiliary, use correct prepositions ('by car'), use 'scenery' (uncountable), ensure verbs agree with singular subject, and use 'watch out the window' or 'look out the window'.

× I usually don't like to capture photos from a running car or bus because it come out blurry, which I don't like most.

✓ I usually don't like to take photos from a moving car or bus because they come out blurry, which I dislike.

Errors: 'capture photos' is acceptable but 'take photos' is more natural. 'running car' is wrong collocation; use 'moving car'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it come out' is incorrect; plural 'photos' requires 'they come out' or refer to 'a photo' with 'it comes out'. 'which I don't like most' is awkward; use 'which I dislike' or 'which I don't like'. Suggestions: match pronoun number to noun, use natural collocations ('take photos', 'moving car'), and simplify the relative clause.

× Instead I prefer watching the sceneries, landscape, rivers and trees.

✓ Instead, I prefer watching the scenery: the landscape, rivers, and trees.

Errors: 'sceneries' should be 'scenery' (uncountable). Missing comma after 'Instead'. Parallel items benefit from article/article use: 'the landscape, rivers, and trees' or simply 'landscapes, rivers, and trees'. Suggestions: use uncountable 'scenery' or plural 'landscapes' consistently, add commas for clarity, and maintain parallel structure.

× It's actually depends on my mood.

✓ It actually depends on my mood.

Error: Redundant contraction 'It's' followed by 'depends' causes subject-verb mismatch; 'It depends' is correct. 'It's depends' is ungrammatical because 'it's' = 'it is' and 'it is depends' is wrong. Suggestion: use 'It depends on my mood.'

× When I want to exercise or hiking then I prefer mountains because it's always exciting.

✓ When I want to exercise or go hiking, I prefer the mountains because it's always exciting.

Errors: 'want to exercise or hiking' mixes infinitive and gerund; use parallel forms: 'want to exercise or go hiking' or 'want to exercise or hike'. 'then' is unnecessary; remove or replace with comma. Article: 'the mountains' is more natural when speaking generally about mountain areas. Suggestions: keep parallel verb forms, include the article 'the' for 'mountains' when appropriate, and punctuate with a comma.

× Or when I want to relax or sunbathing then I prefer see because I like to spend relaxing time with my friends.

✓ Or when I want to relax or sunbathe, I prefer the sea because I like to spend relaxing time with my friends.

Errors: 'relax or sunbathing' mixes infinitive and gerund; use 'relax or sunbathe' (parallel). 'prefer see' misspells 'sea' and misses article; use 'prefer the sea'. 'then' is unnecessary; use comma. Suggestions: use parallel verb forms, correct spelling 'sea', include article 'the' before 'sea', and use commas to separate clauses.