旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be careful with repetition and small grammar slips. Start with a clear topic sentence then add one or two brief supporting details (why you like it, what you notice). Use correct verb forms and avoid duplicate words.

示例: Yes, I enjoy looking out of the window when I travel. For example, I like watching changing landscapes and people, which helps me relax and makes the journey more interesting.

建议: Reduce fillers (uh, um) and fix verb forms and word order. Give a concise topic sentence and one supporting reason with a linking word (because/so) and a specific example of what you photograph.

示例: Sometimes I take photos or videos when I travel long distances because the scenery changes a lot. For instance, I often photograph mountain passes or unique roadside scenes to keep as memories.

建议: Make the subject and pronouns clear and avoid fragments. Give a direct answer, state a clear reason using a linking word, and provide a short supporting detail. Correct tense and pronoun use are important.

示例: I prefer the sea because I live close to it, so I can walk there easily. I enjoy the fresh air and the calm atmosphere, and I often go for walks along the shore.

× Yes, I would love to to look at the window when I'm traveling.

✓ Yes, I would love to look out of the window when I'm traveling.

The original has a repeated word 'to to' and uses 'look at the window' which is less natural than 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window'. The error type is listed as 'Verb + -ing form' because the sentence context involves verb forms; here the infinitive 'to look' should be used once. Suggestion: remove the extra 'to' and use the more natural prepositional phrase 'look out of the window'.

× Yeah, sometimes when I traveling for a long distance, uh, I usually like to sit uh, behind the window and enjoying, enjoying seeing the road.

✓ Yeah, sometimes when I travel long distances, I usually like to sit by the window and enjoy seeing the road.

The sentence contains incorrect verb form 'when I traveling' (missing auxiliary or wrong form) and incorrect use of 'enjoying' after 'like to' (should be base form). These are present tense and verb form errors. Use 'when I travel' for the simple present habitual action, 'travel long distances' for natural phrasing, 'sit by the window' (not 'behind the window'), and 'enjoy' (base form) after 'like to'.

× Also I sometimes uh, take uh, some pictures or videos for memories.

✓ Also I sometimes take some pictures or videos as memories.

This sentence is mostly correct but 'for memories' is unnatural; 'as memories' or 'to keep as memories' is better. Classified under 'Verb + -ing form' because of consistency with requested list; the verb 'take' is correct as base form with 'sometimes'. Suggest using 'as memories' or 'to keep as memories'.

× I prefer the sea because they live right near to the sea.

✓ I prefer the sea because I live right near the sea.

The original uses 'they' which does not agree with the speaker 'I' and repeats 'sea'. This is a pronoun reference and number/person agreement problem categorized here as a singular/plural issue. Change 'they' to 'I' to match the speaker and remove unnecessary 'to' after 'near'.

× I can, which uh, let me uh, go there by walking.

✓ I can walk there.

The original is a fragmented and awkward clause 'I can, which... let me... go there by walking.' This is a sentence structure error. Simplify to 'I can walk there' to convey ability and means. Alternatively 'which lets me walk there' could be used if connected to previous sentence: 'I live near the sea, which lets me walk there.'