旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevap doğal fakat düzensiz ve dolgu sözcükleri fazla. Konuya doğrudan başlayıp (topic sentence) ardından 1–2 destekleyici cümle kullanın. Bağlaçlar (for example, because, so) kullanarak mantıksal akış sağlayın. Kelime seçiminde tekrarları azaltın ve net ifadeler kullanın (örn. “I enjoy looking at trains, building façades and colorful cars”). Maksimum 4–5 cümleyi geçmeyin.

示例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I usually listen to music at the same time because it helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching trains pass by and spotting colorful cars and new buildings, which I find interesting and calming.

建议: Cümle yapısı ve zaman kullanımı üzerinde çalışın; gereksiz duraksamalar ve tekrarlar azaltılmalı. Doğrudan bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, sonra nedenini veya bir örneği verin. Zaman ve fiil uyumuna dikkat edin (I don't like taking photos of views; sometimes I take photos when I see something special).

示例: Not usually — I don't like taking photos of every view. However, if I notice something interesting or unusual, I will take a picture to remember it.

建议: Cevabı net bir konu cümlesiyle verip nedenlerini iki kısa cümleyle açıklayın. Gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimelerden kaçının. Kelime kullanımını düzeltin (sea/sea� vs ocean; sayısız tekrar yerine spesifik nedenler: swimming, relaxing, scenery).

示例: I prefer the sea because I love swimming and relaxing on the beach. I also enjoy the open views and the sound of waves, which make me feel peaceful.

× Especially I really like to umm, listening to music when I look out of the window.

✓ Especially I really like listening to music when I look out of the window.

The gerund form 'listening' should be used without 'to' after 'like' when expressing a general preference. Remove the unnecessary 'to' to form 'like listening to music'. Suggestion: use 'I like listening to music' or 'I really enjoy listening to music.'

× Uh like I love to look like trains, car colors or new buildings.

✓ I love looking at trains, car colors, or new buildings.

The phrase 'look like trains' is incorrect; 'look at' is the correct verb + preposition for viewing objects. Use the gerund 'looking' after 'love' for activities. Suggestion: 'I love looking at trains, car colors, or new buildings.'

× This makes me happy and comfortable.

✓ This makes me happy and comfortable.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change required. 'This' correctly refers to the activity. (Included to keep sentence-by-sentence format.)

× Not a lot because I don't, uh, like to take a photo to views, but sometimes I really liked something and I take a photo of it.

✓ Not a lot because I don't really like taking photos of views, but sometimes I see something I like and I take a photo of it.

Problems included verb form and preposition use. Use 'like taking photos' (gerund) instead of 'like to take a photo to views.' Use 'photos of views' (preposition 'of'). 'Sometimes I really liked something' mixes tenses; use present 'see something I like' to match present habit. Suggestions: 'I don't really like taking photos of views' and 'sometimes I see something I like and I take a photo.'

× Definitely see because I really love to swimming or I really want to see a ocean one day.

✓ Definitely the sea, because I really love swimming and I really want to see an ocean one day.

Multiple issues: 'see' is wrong word choice for 'sea' (homophone error). Use noun 'the sea'. After 'love' use gerund 'swimming' not 'to swimming'. Use the article 'an' before 'ocean' (vowel sound). Maintain parallel structure with 'and'. Suggestion: 'Definitely the sea, because I really love swimming and I want to see an ocean one day.'

× Umm I really like to see oceans or lakes like a big water like umm places I really enjoy to see it.

✓ I really like seeing oceans or lakes, big bodies of water; I really enjoy seeing them.

Use gerund 'seeing' after 'like' and 'enjoy'. 'Like a big water' is incorrect—use 'big bodies of water' and plural pronoun 'them' to refer back. Also avoid repeating 'like'. Suggestion: 'I really like seeing oceans or lakes, big bodies of water, and I really enjoy looking at them.'