旅行— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
考生
Absolutely. I always do this and moreover, I consider it really gorgeous and stunning. And I was in Georgia, uh, we with my family were in car and looked at the scenery.
考官
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
考生
Definitely yes. I take photos of the scenery outside the car window. In fact, when I was in Abu Dhabi, I take a photo this so beautiful rice sun.
考官
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
考生
As for me, I prefer the sea because you can just relaxing and swimming. Uh, looking at the stunning sunrise and gorgeous seashells.
评估
总分
Part 1
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
分数: 72.0建议: Отвечайте более прямо и стройно: начните с короткого утверждения, затем добавьте одно или два конкретных подробных примера без лишних слов и заполнителей (например, избегайте «uh», «moreover», «we with my family were in car»). Используйте связки для плавности (for example, when, because).
示例: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel. For example, when I visited Georgia with my family, we drove through mountain valleys and I enjoyed the changing landscapes the whole time.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
分数: 60.0建议: Улучшите грамматику и конкретику: используйте правильные времена (I took, I have taken), избегайте прямого повторения той же фразы в двух предложениях, и дайте более точное описание того, что вы сфотографировали. Можно добавить причину, почему вы фотографируете.
示例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window. For instance, when I visited Abu Dhabi I took a picture of a beautiful sunrise over the dunes because the light was very striking.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
分数: 68.0建议: Дайте более плавный ответ с корректной грамматикой и одним-двумя конкретными деталями: используйте правильные формы (relaxing → relax, swimming → swim) и связывающие слова для плавности. Избегайте междометий «Uh».
示例: I prefer the sea because I find it more relaxing and I enjoy swimming. For example, I like waking up early to watch the sunrise on the beach and collecting pretty seashells.
语法
× And I was in Georgia, uh, we with my family were in car and looked at the scenery.
✓ And I was in Georgia; my family and I were in a car and looked at the scenery.
The sentence has past tense verbs but incorrect word order and missing articles. Rearranged 'my family and I' to correct subject order and added the article 'a' before 'car'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to connect clauses. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and use 'my family and I' as the subject and 'a car' for the vehicle.
× In fact, when I was in Abu Dhabi, I take a photo this so beautiful rice sun.
✓ In fact, when I was in Abu Dhabi, I took a photo of this beautiful bright sunrise.
The main verb should be in the past tense 'took' to match 'when I was'. 'Photo of' is the correct collocation; 'this so beautiful rice sun' is ungrammatical and likely intended 'this beautiful bright sunrise'. Recommendation: use appropriate noun phrases and past tense consistency.
× As for me, I prefer the sea because you can just relaxing and swimming.
✓ As for me, I prefer the sea because you can just relax and swim.
After 'can' use the base form of the verb, not the -ing form. Replace 'relaxing and swimming' with 'relax and swim'. Also keep parallel structure for both verbs. Suggestion: after modal verbs use the base verb form.
× Uh, looking at the stunning sunrise and gorgeous seashells.
✓ I also enjoy looking at the stunning sunrise and collecting beautiful seashells.
This fragment lacks a clear subject and verb, making it a sentence fragment. Recast as a full sentence with subject 'I' and verbs 'enjoy' and 'collecting' (or 'collect'). Provide parallel structure and clearer meaning. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by including subject and finite verb.
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