旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce hesitation and grammar errors, make answers more concise and coherent. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct key grammar: 'lookout' → 'look out', 'it fill me' → 'it makes me', 'scenarios' → 'scenery', 'listen song' → 'listen to music'. Avoid repetition and unnecessary fillers (uh).

示例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery relaxes me. For example, I like watching trees and small towns pass by, which makes long journeys feel shorter. I also often listen to music while I watch, which helps me unwind.

建议: Be precise and grammatical, reduce filler words, and avoid repetition. Start with a direct answer, then give specific examples and a brief reason. Use correct verbs and nouns: 'shows' → 'share', 'scenario' → 'scenery', 'pound' → 'pond', 'taking a pictures' → 'taking pictures'.

示例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window and share them on Snapchat. For instance, I like to photograph mountains, lakes and small villages because the light and colours look beautiful from the road.

建议: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary and sentence structure. Fix grammar: 'relying on beach' → 'relaxing on the beach', 'It make' → 'It makes', 'friend' → 'friends'. Give one or two specific reasons and an example of an activity or memory to support your preference, using linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

示例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. For example, my family and I often go boating and try local seafood, which makes our trips fun and memorable.

× Yes, I really enjoy lookout the window whenever I'm travelling on a bus or in a car because it fill me more relaxing and refreshing.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy looking out of the window whenever I'm travelling on a bus or in a car because it makes me feel more relaxed and refreshed.

The verb 'enjoy' must be followed by the -ing form: 'looking', not 'lookout' (which is also one word meaning 'be careful'). Use the correct preposition 'out of the window'. Subject-verb agreement and verb choice: 'it makes me feel' is required instead of 'it fill me' and use adjectives 'relaxed' and 'refreshed' after 'feel'.

× I think, uh, uh, watching a beautiful scenarios make trip more shorter and convenient and uh, it's a really enjoyable moment.

✓ I think watching beautiful scenery makes the trip shorter and more convenient, and it's a really enjoyable moment.

Remove filler sounds and correct noun form: 'scenery' is uncountable (not 'a beautiful scenarios'). Subject-verb agreement: singular subject 'watching beautiful scenery' takes 'makes'. Use comparative 'shorter' without 'more' for single-word comparative; 'more convenient' is correct. Add article 'the trip' for clarity and improve sentence flow.

× I often listen song whenever I sit at the window and.

✓ I often listen to songs whenever I sit by the window.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to': 'listen to'. Use plural 'songs' or 'music' and the preposition 'by the window' is more natural than 'at the window'. Remove trailing 'and' to complete the sentence.

× Oh yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of outside the scenario of the car.

✓ Oh yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of the scenery outside the car.

Use 'scenery' instead of 'scenario' (wrong word) and place 'outside the car' after 'scenery' for natural order. 'Taking pictures' correctly uses the -ing form after 'enjoy'.

× I use Snapchat to shows my daily update updates when I travel by a car.

✓ I use Snapchat to show my daily updates when I travel by car.

After 'to' use the base verb 'show', not 'shows'. Remove duplicate 'update updates' and use plural 'updates'. Omit article 'a' before 'car' when speaking generally: 'by car'.

× I uh, really enjoy taking a pictures of beautiful scenarios like uh, mountain, lake, pound or many other things.

✓ I really enjoy taking pictures of beautiful scenes like mountains, lakes, ponds, and many other things.

Do not use the article 'a' before plural 'pictures'. Use 'scenes' or 'scenery' rather than 'scenarios'. Use plural nouns 'mountains, lakes, ponds' and correct spelling 'pond'. Add 'and' before the last item and remove fillers.

× It's filming more enjoyable.

✓ It makes the experience more enjoyable.

'It's filming more enjoyable' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'It makes the experience more enjoyable' or 'Taking photos makes it more enjoyable' to express cause and effect.

× I prefer the view near the sea because I love swimming and relying on beach.

✓ I prefer the view near the sea because I love swimming and relaxing on the beach.

Use 'relaxing' instead of 'relying' which is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'on the beach'. 'Swimming and relaxing on the beach' is parallel and natural.

× Also there are many activities to do like surfing, swimming and boating as well.

✓ Also, there are many activities to do, like surfing, swimming, and boating.

Sentence is mostly fine but add commas for clarity and remove redundant 'as well'. Ensure parallel list and punctuation.

× It make more enjoyable and fun moment.

✓ It makes for a more enjoyable and fun time.

Subject-verb agreement: use 'makes' not 'make'. Use idiomatic noun phrases: 'a more enjoyable and fun time' or 'a more enjoyable moment'. Add preposition 'for' when appropriate.

× I can spend time with my family and friend there and I love seafood also.

✓ I can spend time with my family and friends there, and I also love seafood.

Use plural 'friends' to match general meaning. Place 'also' before the verb for natural word order: 'I also love seafood'. Add comma for clarity.