旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và phát âm các thì: tránh sai cấu trúc như “seen” (phải là “seeing”) và dùng thì phù hợp. Trả lời nên rõ ràng với 1 câu chủ đề rồi 1–2 câu hỗ trợ, dùng liên từ hợp lý (for example, because, so) để mạch lạc. Ngoài ra rút gọn lặp từ (“looking at the window” và “view outside”) bằng cách thay thế bằng từ đồng nghĩa hoặc cụm lại.

示例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when travelling. I find watching the passing scenery very relaxing because it helps me unwind after a busy day, and I often notice small details like old houses or colourful gardens which I would otherwise miss.

建议: Tránh lặp ý và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ “it's help me feels” → “it helps me feel”). Trả lời ngắn gọn: câu chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng linking words như “because” hoặc “so” đúng vị trí và dùng danh từ phù hợp (“natural scenery” thay vì “natural views”).

示例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it helps me feel calm. For example, I like to capture stretches of countryside or interesting clouds, then review the pictures later to remember the trip.

建议: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu và logic: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer the mountains) và sau đó nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và trật tự từ (“standing in the mountain can I can see…” nên là “when I stand on a mountain I can see…”). Hạn chế câu quá dài; chia thành câu ngắn có liên từ như “because” hoặc “so”.

示例: I prefer the mountains because when I stand on a summit I can enjoy wide views of the city and the sky. I also like hearing birds and feeling the fresh air, which makes hiking very refreshing.

× Well, looking at the window and seen the view outside help me relax and make me calm.

✓ Well, looking out of the window and seeing the view outside help me relax and make me calm.

The verb 'seen' is the past participle and is incorrect after a gerund; use the present participle 'seeing'. Also use the correct prepositional phrase 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window'. Suggestion: Use 'seeing' after 'looking' when describing simultaneous actions (gerund + present participle).

× Yes, absolutely. I really love taking photos at the natural views because especially the view outside the car window because it's help me feels comfortable and relaxed.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I really love taking photos of natural views, especially the view outside the car window, because it helps me feel comfortable and relaxed.

Replace 'taking photos at' with 'taking photos of' (correct preposition for photographing a subject). Remove redundant 'because especially' and use one connector. Change 'it's help me feels' to 'it helps me feel': 'it' needs verb 'helps' (third person singular) and 'feel' stays base form after 'helps'. Suggestion: Use 'of' with 'photos' and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct verb form after causative verbs like 'help/helps'.

× Well I'm saying mountain is on the top of land and standing in the mountain can I can see all of the views in my city and also the sky is very big I can see all the birds.

✓ Well, I'm saying the mountain is on top of the land, and standing on the mountain I can see all the views of my city; also, the sky is very big and I can see many birds.

Add definite article 'the' before 'mountain' and 'the land'. Use 'on top of' rather than 'on the top of land'. Use 'standing on the mountain' (preposition). Remove duplicate 'can'. Use 'I can see' with correct subject-verb order. Change 'all the birds' to 'many birds' for naturalness. Ensure commas or connectors separate clauses. Suggestion: Check article usage ('the') and avoid repeating modal verbs; maintain correct word order after introductory phrases.