旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be grammatically accurate, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors: use present simple (I travel), say “I sit in window seats” and explain reasons clearly (I enjoy the view and find it relaxing). Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy observing the passing scenery. For that reason I try to sit in a window seat so I can watch trees, buildings and people go by, which I find relaxing and interesting.

建议: Answer in the present simple for habits and be specific about what you photograph. Use linking words (for example, or when) and limit to 2–4 clear sentences. Remove filler words and unclear phrases. Mention reasons why you take photos and give a concrete example.

示例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially mountains and green fields. For example, last month I photographed a dramatic sunset over a ridge because I wanted to remember the colours and textures.

建议: Give a direct preference statement, then give two clear, specific reasons using linking words (because/so/for example). Correct grammar: say “I prefer the mountains” and avoid vague fillers like “UMM.” Mention a specific activity (hiking, trekking) or sensory detail to support your choice. Keep within 2–4 sentences.

示例: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I enjoy hiking and the peaceful natural views. For example, I like trekking up trails and watching panoramic vistas, which makes me feel refreshed and active.

× Yes, I look out the window at the scenery when I traveling by bus or car and at the most important things I have sit on only the window seats because I like to the voice outside the world.

✓ Yes, I look out the window at the scenery when I am traveling by bus or car, and most importantly I sit only in window seats because I like the sounds of the outside world.

Errors: missing auxiliary verb with present participle (should be 'am traveling'), incorrect word order and article use ('at the most important things' unclear → 'most importantly'), wrong verb form 'have sit' should be 'sit', preposition 'on only the window seats' should be 'in window seats', incorrect phrase 'like to the voice outside the world' should be 'like the sounds of the outside world'. Suggestion: Use 'be' + present participle for continuous actions (I am traveling), place adverbial phrases correctly (most importantly), use correct prepositions for seating (sit in a seat), and choose appropriate nouns for meaning (sounds instead of voice).

× Yes, I took photos of the scenery outside the car windows, like the scenery of nature things, the mountains or the many green scenery and the if the any, uh, unlike situation that I expect not that all things I had.

✓ Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside car windows, such as natural landscapes, mountains, and green areas, and sometimes I photograph unusual situations I did not expect.

Errors: inconsistent tense (starts with past 'took' while general habit should be present 'take'), redundant and incorrect nouns ('scenery of nature things', 'many green scenery'), awkward clause 'the if the any... I had'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habits, choose concise nouns ('natural landscapes' or 'green areas'), and simplify clauses to express unexpected events ('unusual situations I did not expect').

× As per my preference is the Morrison Mountain, but I always like the worst mountain and the sea but mostly prefer the mountains because I like to the UMM. I like to watch a view like the mountains and at the trekking at mountain and.

✓ I prefer Morrison Mountain, but I like both mountains and the sea; mostly I prefer mountains because I enjoy hiking and watching the views from them.

Errors: incorrect sentence structure ('As per my preference is'), contradictory and unclear phrase 'always like the worst mountain', unnecessary filler 'the UMM', incorrect infinitive use 'like to watch a view like the mountains', and wrong preposition 'at the trekking at mountain'. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb order ('I prefer'), avoid vague or contradictory adjectives ('worst' is wrong here), use verbs that match activities ('enjoy hiking'), and use correct prepositions ('watch views from the mountains', 'go trekking in the mountains').