旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant and expresses enthusiasm, but it is slightly redundant and wordy. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (like "suddenly" and "umm"), and use one or two specific supporting details with a linking word to make your response concise and coherent. Keep to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing landscape. For example, I like seeing rural fields and small villages pass by, and I especially enjoy sunrise and sunset views because of their colours and atmosphere.

建议: Your answer communicates the idea but contains hesitations and repetitive phrases. Improve fluency by removing fillers, using clearer reasons, and adding a brief specific example of a photo you took. Use a linking phrase (for example, "for instance" or "because") to structure your supporting detail.

示例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery because those views are usually unique. For instance, on a recent trip I photographed a river winding through autumn trees so I could remember the colours and the peaceful mood later.

建议: Your response answers the question directly and gives a clear reason, but phrasing is awkward (e.g., "prefer both majorly") and could be tightened. Choose a concise expression ("I like both"), add a linking word to explain why, and include one specific detail about what you enjoy in each setting to enrich the answer.

示例: I like both the mountains and the sea because my hometown is flat, so both feel special to me. For example, I enjoy the fresh, crisp air and hiking trails in the mountains, while at the seaside I love listening to the waves and walking along the sand.

× Yes, suddenly I peep outside the window when I'm traveling by bus or by car, mostly because of the scenic view that is outside.

✓ Yes, I suddenly peep out of the window when I'm traveling by bus or by car, mostly because of the scenic views outside.

The original uses 'peep outside the window' which is unnatural; correct phrase is 'peep out of the window'. 'Scenic view that is outside' is wordy and non-idiomatic; use plural 'scenic views outside' to match general reference. Also move 'suddenly' to after 'I' for natural word order. Suggestions: use 'peep out of the window' and 'scenic views outside'.

× And as I'm a travel enthusiast, I love looking outside to the environment and the beautiful nature.

✓ And as I'm a travel enthusiast, I love looking at the environment and the beautiful nature.

Use 'look at' not 'look outside to' when directing attention toward something. 'Beautiful nature' is acceptable but 'the' before 'beautiful nature' is optional; keep 'the' only if referring to a specific nature in context. Suggestion: use 'look at the environment and the beautiful nature' or 'look at the beautiful scenery.'

× The sunset and the sunrise are the most magnificent views.

✓ Sunsets and sunrises are the most magnificent views.

Using definite article 'the' before both 'sunset' and 'sunrise' is awkward in a general statement. Plural nouns ('Sunsets and sunrises') suit a general preference. Alternatively 'The sunset and the sunrise are magnificent' is acceptable for specific instances. Suggestion: use plurals for general statements.

× Definitely I take photos because umm the scenes that are outside are not regularly seen.

✓ I definitely take photos because the scenes outside are not seen regularly.

Adverb 'definitely' more naturally follows subject 'I' as 'I definitely take photos.' Move 'definitely' after subject. 'Not regularly seen' is better as 'not seen regularly' for natural adverb placement. Remove filler 'umm' in written form. Suggestion: place adverbs close to the verb they modify.

× When you travel or get event to a new place, then only you get an opportunity to witness the beautiful environment and scenic views outside.

✓ When you travel or arrive at a new place, you have the opportunity to see the beautiful environment and scenic views.

Phrase 'get event to' is incorrect; use 'arrive at' or 'go to'. 'Then only you get an opportunity' is unnatural; use 'you have the opportunity' or 'you get the chance.' 'Witness' is formal and can be replaced by 'see.' Suggestion: use 'arrive at' and 'have the opportunity' for clarity.

× So it is definitely advisable to take photos so that you can feel nostalgic afterwards.

✓ So it is advisable to take photos so that you can feel nostalgic afterward.

Double 'so' is repetitive; remove first 'so' or restructure. 'Definitely advisable' is acceptable, but 'definitely' can be omitted. Use 'afterward' (American) or 'afterwards' (British) consistently; keep one form. Also 'so that' correctly expresses purpose. Suggestion: simplify to 'It is advisable to take photos so that you can feel nostalgic afterward.'

× Honestly, I prefer both majorly because none of them is there in my hometown.

✓ Honestly, I mostly prefer both because neither of them is in my hometown.

'Majorly' is informal and usually incorrect here; use 'mostly'. 'None of them is there' should be 'neither of them is' for two items. 'In my hometown' is more natural than 'there in my hometown.' Suggestion: use 'neither' for two items and avoid 'majorly.'

× My hometown has plain area so whenever I go outside and see mountains or if I go to a beach, I really feel mesmerized and overwhelmed.

✓ My hometown is a plain area, so whenever I go elsewhere and see mountains or visit a beach, I really feel mesmerized and overwhelmed.

'Has plain area' is incorrect; use 'is a plain area' or 'is flat.' 'Go outside' is vague; 'go elsewhere' or 'go out of town' is clearer. Use parallel structure: 'see mountains or visit a beach.' Suggestion: use 'is a plain area' and keep parallel verbs for clarity.