旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 発音や語彙の誤り、文法の混乱、冗長さを直す必要があります。まず「lookout」は動詞句としては間違いで「look out」が正しいこと、また「starting three such as mountains and small *******」は意味不明なので具体的な対象（例えば “mountains and small villages”）に直すべきです。文は短め（最大5文）かつ論理的に組み立て、トピック文→具体例→感想の順で構成してください。接続詞（for example, and, so）を使って文のつながりを明確にしましょう。発音で特に注意すべきは「landscape」「relaxing」「memorable」。

示例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because mountain ranges and small villages relax me. For example, I enjoy watching the changing landscape while sipping a cup of coffee. Those scenes always feel peaceful and create lasting memories.

建议: 内容は分かりやすく目的も示せていますが、語彙ミス（“sensory”→“scenery”）とやや単調な表現を改善してください。より具体的な理由や状況（例えば、朝焼け、古い建物、季節の変化）を加えると高得点につながります。接続語（because → so that, for example）を使って論理的に説明しましょう。発音は“scenery”、“capture”、“remember”に注意。

示例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because I find the views beautiful and memorable. For example, I like to photograph sunrise over the fields or an interesting old building so that I can remember the moment later.

建议: 表現の誤り（“sensory”→“scenery”または“clean air”）や語順の問題を直す必要があります。理由は明確で良いので、接続詞でつなぎ、具体的な活動（hiking, birdwatching）を入れると良いです。また“the sea is less appearing to me”は不自然なので“I’m less attracted to the sea”など自然な表現に直しましょう。発音で“wildlife”“attracted”に注意。

示例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the fresh air and scenic views among trees and flowers. I also like hiking and spotting wildlife there, and since I don't enjoy swimming, I'm less attracted to the sea.

× Yes, I often lookout the window when I travel by bus or car because starting three such as mountains and small ******* it's very relaxing.

✓ Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because scenery such as mountains and small hills is very relaxing.

The phrase 'lookout' is a noun; the correct verb phrase is 'look out (of) the window' so use base verb form 'look out'. 'Starting three such as...' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'scenery such as...'. 'Small *******' seems to be 'small hills' or similar; use a noun. Use 'is' for the singular noun 'scenery'. Suggestion: use 'I often look out of the window' and replace unclear fragments with appropriate nouns.

× I especially enjoy watching landscape with a cup of coffee.

✓ I especially enjoy watching the landscape with a cup of coffee.

The countable noun 'landscape' here needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to the specific view seen from the vehicle. Suggestion: include 'the' when referring to a particular landscape or scenery.

× Those views make me cheap, memorable.

✓ Those views make me feel happy and create memorable moments.

The adjective 'cheap' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'cheerful' or 'happy'. Also 'memorable' needs restructuring: you can say 'create memorable moments' or 'feel happy and remember them'. Suggestion: choose adjectives that match intended emotion and use appropriate verbs like 'make me feel'.

× Yes, I often take photos of the sensory outside the window because they are beautiful or interesting scenes I want to remember.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because they are beautiful or interesting scenes I want to remember.

The word 'sensory' is an adjective; the correct noun for what you see outside the window is 'scenery'. Use 'scenery' when referring to views. Suggestion: replace incorrect adjective with the proper noun.

× I like to capture those moments so I can look back at them later.

✓ I like to capture those moments so I can look back on them later.

The preposition commonly used with 'look back' when referring to memories is 'on' ('look back on'). Using 'at' is not idiomatic here. Suggestion: use 'look back on' to mean 'review memories'.

× I prefer the mountains because I enjoy sensory and fresh air among the trees and flowers.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the scenery and fresh air among the trees and flowers.

Again 'sensory' is incorrect; use the noun 'scenery'. Also add the definite article 'the' before 'scenery' for specificity. Suggestion: use 'the scenery' to refer to the visible surroundings.

× I also like spotting wildlife there and I don't enjoy swimming so the sea is less appearing to me.

✓ I also like spotting wildlife there, and I don't enjoy swimming, so the sea appeals to me less.

The phrase 'less appearing to me' is ungrammatical. Use 'appeal to me less' or 'is less appealing to me' to express preference. 'Appeal' is the correct verb here. Suggestion: use 'appeals to me less' or 'is less appealing to me' for clarity.