旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy (e.g., saying “when I go abroad I go to another city” is repetitive) and correct small grammar issues (use plural/singular agreement and articles). Use linking words to connect ideas, for example: “so” or “and”.

示例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car, because I enjoy seeing how a new city differs from my own. For example, when I visited a coastal town last year, I took several photos of the architecture and street life, which helped me remember the trip.

建议: Be more specific and natural: give one clear reason and a concrete example. Use correct verb forms and compact sentences (max 5). Replace vague phrases like “the great views of everything” with specific details. Use a linking word such as “so” or “and” to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I often take photos through the car window to remember the views and atmosphere of a place. For instance, on a recent trip I photographed a colorful market from the bus, and looking at those photos now makes me feel relaxed and happy.

建议: Answer directly with a clear preference or balanced view, then give a specific reason. Fix grammar and word order (e.g., “it didn't have two high mountains and the sea” is unclear). Use linking words like “because” or “however” and give a short example of how each place makes you feel.

示例: I like both, but if I had to choose I prefer the sea because I rarely see it near my hometown of Nanjing. Because there are no high mountains or a coastline there, visiting the sea feels refreshing and relaxing, while the mountains are peaceful and good for hiking.

× the views out of the window is different from my city

✓ the views out of the window are different from those in my city

Subject 'the views' is plural so the verb must be 'are' not 'is'. Also use 'those in my city' to compare plural 'views' correctly and avoid repeating 'my city'. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and use 'those' for plural comparison.

× I can take beautiful photos of it

✓ I can take beautiful photos of them

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers back to plural 'views'; use the plural pronoun 'them'. The verb phrase 'can take' is fine; ensure pronoun number agrees with the noun it replaces.

× I can remember the great views of everything when I go back home

✓ I can remember the great views of everything when I go back home

No grammatical correction needed for verb forms here. 'Can remember' and 'go back' are appropriate. Keep this sentence as is. (Included for completeness because of pronoun/tense consistency checks.)

× I can also enjoy the fun time I go to a travelling

✓ I can also enjoy the fun times when I travel

The phrase 'I go to a travelling' is ungrammatical. Use the verb 'travel' and say 'when I travel' or 'on a trip'. Also 'fun time' is better as plural 'fun times' in this context. Suggestion: replace noun phrase with the verb 'travel' and use 'when' to introduce the time clause.

× It makes me feel relaxing

✓ It makes me feel relaxed

Use the adjective 'relaxed' to describe a person's feeling, not the present participle 'relaxing' which describes something that causes relaxation. Change to 'relaxed' to correctly express the speaker's state.

× Nanjing, it didn't have two high mountains and the sea

✓ Nanjing doesn't have high mountains or a sea

Unnecessary 'it' after 'Nanjing' and incorrect tense 'didn't have' for a general fact. Use present simple 'doesn't have' for a general characteristic. Also use 'high mountains or a sea' instead of 'two high mountains and the sea' for natural expression. Suggestion: omit redundant pronoun and use correct present tense.

× So when I go to the mountains and the sea, it's a good feeling of me

✓ So when I go to the mountains or the sea, I feel good

'It's a good feeling of me' is ungrammatical. Express feelings with subject 'I' + verb 'feel' (I feel good). Use 'or' because visiting either is being referred to; if both, use 'and'. Simplify structure to 'I feel good' for natural English.