旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve fluency and reduce repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details using linking words (for example, because and so). Fix basic grammar: use correct verb forms and articles, and remove filler sounds (uh). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching streets and countryside passing by, which makes the journey feel shorter. So I usually spend most trips observing the views rather than doing other activities.

建议: Be more concise and use correct tense and grammar. Begin with a direct response (Yes/No), then explain briefly with a reason using linking words (because, so). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “I have requirement for my quality.” Instead say “I prefer high-quality photos.”

示例: No, I usually don't take photos because the vehicle often shakes and the pictures turn out blurry. Therefore I prefer to just watch the scenery and enjoy the moment, rather than trying to take high-quality photos from a moving car.

建议: Answer directly and improve grammar and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence (I don't have a preference), then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (because, for example). Avoid tense errors and finish the sentence cleanly.

示例: I don't have a strong preference between mountains and the sea because both relax me. For example, mountains calm me with fresh air and hiking opportunities, while the sea helps me unwind with its waves and beaches. So I enjoy visiting either depending on the trip.

× Yes, I like, I very like, uh, look out the window when traveling by bus or car.

✓ Yes, I really like to look out the window when travelling by bus or car.

The student uses incorrect present tense and awkward adverb placement ('I very like', 'look out' missing to-infinitive). Use present simple 'I like' with the infinitive 'to look' or a gerund 'looking'. Place adverb 'really' before the verb phrase: 'I really like to look...' or 'I really like looking...'. Also standardize spelling (travelling). Suggestion: practice 'I like to + verb' and 'I like + -ing' structures and common adverb positions.

× It I can look the things and the views outside the window.

✓ I can see the things and the views outside the window.

The verb 'look' is misused; after 'can' use the base verb and 'see' better expresses perception. 'Look' usually needs 'at' or a to-infinitive. The original also contains an extra 'It' and incorrect object use. Suggestion: use modal + base verb (can see) or 'look at the views'.

× It helps me relax and that's the funniest part of traveling for me.

✓ It helps me relax and that's the most enjoyable part of travelling for me.

'Funniest' means most funny (superlative) and implies humorous rather than relaxing/enjoyable. Use 'most enjoyable' or 'most relaxing' to match intended meaning. Also keep present simple tense. Suggestion: choose adjectives that match the meaning: enjoyable, relaxing.

× So I always look at the window and to see what's happening outside and the views outside.

✓ So I always look out of the window to see what's happening outside and to enjoy the views.

Use the phrasal verb 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' and follow with 'to' + verb for purpose ('to see'). Repeating 'outside' is redundant; use 'views' with 'enjoy'. Suggestion: combine actions with infinitive purpose and avoid repetition.

× No, I don't really take photos because like when I'm taking car or bus the the the it's always there sometimes shaking.

✓ No, I don't really take photos because when I'm in a car or bus it's often shaking.

Incorrect structure 'when I'm taking car or bus' and unnecessary filler words. Use 'in a car or bus' to indicate location. 'It's often shaking' or 'it often shakes' describes motion. Suggestion: say 'when I'm in a car or on a bus, it's often shaky' or 'the vehicle is often shaking'.

× So I can't take a very beautiful photo of the scenes scenes outside.

✓ So I can't take very good photos of the scenery outside.

'a very beautiful photo of the scenes scenes' is awkward and repetitive. Use plural 'photos' and 'scenery' as uncountable noun. 'Can't' correctly expresses inability in present. Suggestion: use 'take good photos of the scenery'.

× So I just watching them.

✓ So I just watch them.

After 'just' use base form 'watch' in present simple for habitual action, not present participle 'watching'. Suggestion: use 'I just watch them' or 'I just enjoy watching them'.

× But I didn't actually take a lot of pictures of them because I have requirement for my quality of taking photo.

✓ But I don't actually take many pictures because I have requirements for the quality of my photos.

Mix of past and present tenses ('didn't' then 'I have'). The speaker means habitual present, so use present simple 'don't'. 'A lot of' with plural is acceptable but 'many' fits formal speech. 'I have requirement for my quality of taking photo' is ungrammatical; correct to 'I have requirements for the quality of my photos.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use natural collocations: 'quality of my photos'.

× I have never saw this before.

✓ I have never seen this before.

Use present perfect 'have seen', not simple past 'saw', after 'have never'. 'Have' + past participle required. Suggestion: practice present perfect forms: have/has + past participle.

× I don't think I have a preference between mountain or sea.

✓ I don't think I have a preference between the mountains and the sea.

Use 'between' with two parallel noun forms and include articles or plural: 'the mountains and the sea' or 'mountains or the sea' but better 'the mountains and the sea'. Suggestion: ensure parallel structure and use articles appropriately.

× Both of them uh makes me relax and the both of them are very interesting and I like nature so I don't say I like both mountains and seas.

✓ Both of them make me relax, and they are both very interesting. I like nature, so I would say I like both mountains and the sea.

'Both of them makes' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; plural subject needs 'make'. 'The both of them' is awkward; use 'they are both'. 'Seas' is odd here; use 'the sea' or 'the sea and mountains'. Also tense/modal clarity: 'I would say' fits. Suggestion: ensure plural subjects take plural verbs and use natural noun forms.

× Traveling is always help me to relax and.

✓ Traveling always helps me to relax.

Missing subject-verb agreement and incomplete sentence. 'Traveling' (singular gerund) needs 'helps' (third person singular), and sentence ended abruptly. Remove trailing 'and' and use correct verb form. Suggestion: complete sentences and match subject and verb.