旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect collocations (e.g., say “watch the scenery” not “watch the sceneries”).

示例: Yes. I usually sit by the window on long journeys because I enjoy watching the scenery. For example, I like seeing towns and countryside change along the route, which helps me learn about different places.

建议: Give a direct answer first, then explain briefly and clearly why you do or do not take photos. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas, and avoid repetitions and filler phrases.

示例: Sometimes. I sometimes take photos, but it can be difficult because the car is moving and the images often come out blurred. So I usually record short videos instead when I want to capture the view.

建议: Answer the choice clearly (mountains or sea) with one main reason, then add a specific supporting detail. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “beach” not “it's beach”) and correct grammar for effects (e.g., “relaxes me” not “relaxed me”).

示例: I prefer the sea because the beach relaxes me. For example, I enjoy the sound of waves and the sea breeze, which help me unwind after a busy week.

× Yes, especially yes, when I'm traveling a long time, I like to sit in the window and I like to watch the sceneries.

✓ Yes, especially when I'm traveling for a long time, I like to sit by the window and watch the scenery.

Tense and phrasing: 'traveling a long time' is awkward — use 'traveling for a long time' to indicate duration (present continuous context). Word choice and articles: 'sit in the window' should be 'sit by the window' or 'sit at the window'. 'sceneries' is uncountable here; use 'scenery'. Simplify repetitive 'I like to' and 'watch' fits without 'to'. Suggestion: use natural collocations and correct uncountable nouns.

× So that's quite gives me it's gives me to see the place.

✓ So that really allows me to see the place.

Sentence structure and word choice: the original is ungrammatical and redundant ('that's quite gives me it's gives me'). Use 'that allows me to' or 'that lets me' to express ability. Keep the clause concise and grammatical.

× I do sometimes, yes I do but it's quite hard when it's when you're traveling and taking the photos is to focus is quite hard but I take sometimes videos as well.

✓ I do sometimes, yes, but it's quite hard when you're traveling to focus when taking photos, so I sometimes take videos instead.

Tense and structure: remove repetition and correct infinitive use: 'to focus when taking photos' is correct. 'I take sometimes videos' is awkward; use 'I sometimes take videos'. Use commas to separate clauses. Maintain present simple for habits.

× Actually I like the boat, I like the mountain and because of the green greeneries and also I like the beach and it's beach also make me relaxing.

✓ Actually I like boats and mountains because of the greenery, and I also like the beach; the beach relaxes me.

Article and plural use: 'I like the boat, I like the mountain' should be plural or general ('boats and mountains') when speaking generally. 'green greeneries' is incorrect — use 'greenery' (uncountable) or 'green landscapes'. 'it's beach also make me relaxing' has article, verb form and adjective errors: use 'the beach relaxes me' (simple present, third person singular). Also prefer concise phrasing.

× The wind and the water, the sound of the water, it's relaxed me as well.

✓ The wind and the sound of the water relax me as well.

Tense and subject-verb agreement: 'it's relaxed me' mixes tense and subject; use present simple 'relax' because subject 'the wind and the sound of the water' is plural, so verb is 'relax' (not 'relaxed' or 'relaxes'). Remove unnecessary pronoun 'it's'.