旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Correct grammar and word choice: say “I always look” (not “looking”) and replace unclear word “fuse” with “scenery” or “views.” Keep the answer concise and add one specific detail with a linking phrase. Avoid repetition (e.g., “screen” already implies phone).

示例: Yes, I always look out the window at the beautiful scenery when I travel, because it helps me rest my eyes from the phone. For example, I enjoy watching farmland and rivers pass by on long journeys.

建议: Improve natural phrasing and specificity. Use present simple (“I like taking photos”) and give one concise reason with a linking word (e.g., “because” or “so that”). Avoid vague phrase “relieve those moments” — use “capture” or “share those moments.”

示例: Yes, I like taking photos of landscapes outside the car window because they capture unique light and colors. For instance, I often share sunset photos on my social media to remember the trip.

建议: Polish grammar and reduce redundancy. Use natural collocations: “go on an adventure” and “go hiking.” Combine reasons using linking words (e.g., “because” / “while”) and be specific about what you enjoy at each place. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

示例: It depends on my mood. Sometimes I prefer the mountains because I love hiking and watching the sunrise, which feels peaceful. While other times I choose the sea to sunbathe and swim, especially in summer when I want to relax.

× Yes, I always looking out the window at the beautiful fuse when traveling because it helps me take my eyes off the phone screen once in a while.

✓ Yes, I always look out the window at the beautiful view when traveling because it helps me take my eyes off the phone screen once in a while.

The original sentence uses 'always looking' which is incorrect because a finite verb is required with the subject 'I' in simple present. The correct form is 'I always look'. Also 'fuse' appears to be a typo for 'view'. Suggestion: use 'I always look' for habitual actions and correct the noun to 'view'. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Yes, I like taking photos of beautiful landscapes outside the car windows. Sometimes I love to post them on my social media to relieve those moments.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos of beautiful landscapes outside the car window. Sometimes I like to post them on my social media to share those moments.

'Car windows' is acceptable, but when referring to the window of the vehicle you are in, the singular 'car window' is more natural. Also 'love to post' is not incorrect grammatically but 'like' fits the conversational tone; 'relieve those moments' is incorrect collocation — use 'share those moments' or 'relive those moments' depending on meaning. Suggestion: choose 'share those moments' to express posting on social media. Grammar problem type ID: 1 and 22

× It depends on my mood. Sometimes I like to go to an adventure and hiking in the mountains because watching sunrise is my favorite part of hiking.

✓ It depends on my mood. Sometimes I like to go on an adventure and go hiking in the mountains because watching the sunrise is my favorite part of hiking.

The phrase should be 'go on an adventure' not 'go to an adventure'. Also mixing 'go on an adventure and hiking' is ungrammatical; use parallel verbs: 'go on an adventure and go hiking' or 'go on an adventure and hike'. 'Watching sunrise' needs the definite article: 'the sunrise'. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure and include 'the' before 'sunrise'. Grammar problem type ID: 8 and 11

× But sometimes I also love to go sunbathing and play in the summer on the beach.

✓ But sometimes I also love to go sunbathing and play on the beach in the summer.

The phrase 'play in the summer on the beach' has awkward word order; place time expressions ('in the summer') after the place or at the end: 'play on the beach in the summer'. 'Go sunbathing' is fine. Suggestion: order the elements as subject + verb + place + time for natural word order. Grammar problem type ID: 20