旅行— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Speak more clearly and use correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid confusing words like “biking” when you mean travelling by vehicle, and keep the answer within 2–4 sentences. Use a linking word to add one supporting detail (reason or example). For instance, say when and why you look out of the window and give a short example of a scene you enjoy.

示例: Yes. I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or taxi because it helps me relax. For example, I like watching city streets and parks pass by, which makes the journey feel shorter.

建议: Provide a clear, grammatically correct reason and one short supporting detail. Begin with a direct answer (Yes/No), then link with because or so to explain. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: No, I usually don’t take photos from a moving vehicle because I prefer to enjoy the view directly. For example, I find it more pleasant to watch passing streets and people than to take pictures that often come out blurry.

建议: Give a concise direct preference and a clear reason with correct vocabulary (e.g., sound of waves). Use one linking word such as “because” and provide a short specific detail or example of how the sea relaxes you. Avoid filler words and repetition.

示例: I prefer the sea because the sound of the waves relaxes me. For instance, when I sit by the shore I feel calmer and can think more clearly, so I enjoy coastal views more than mountain scenery.

× When I travel, looking out of the window makes me feel relaxed and chill out, so I usually look out the window on biking by taking bus or taxis.

✓ When I travel, looking out of the window makes me feel relaxed and helps me chill out, so I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or taxi.

The original sentence misuses 'on biking by taking bus or taxis' and repeats ideas. Use 'helps me chill out' to combine verbs correctly; 'when I travel by bus or taxi' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also change plural 'taxis' to singular 'taxi' after 'by' which commonly pairs with singular vehicle names when speaking generally. Ensure verb forms: 'helps me chill out' uses base verb after 'helps.'

× No, I used to just watching look watching outside and biking take by taking bus any vehicles.

✓ No, I used to just watch the view outside when taking buses or other vehicles.

After 'used to' the base form 'watch' must be used, not 'watching' or 'look.' Also restructure phrase: 'when taking buses or other vehicles' is a correct clause; use plural 'buses' and 'other vehicles' for generality. Remove redundant words and choose correct verb forms.

× I don't enjoy taking photos at the time because I like look directly.

✓ I don't enjoy taking photos because I prefer to look directly.

'I like look directly' is ungrammatical: use 'prefer to look' or 'like looking' with correct verb form. Also 'at the time' is unnecessary and awkward here, so remove it for clarity.

× Oh I like both the sea and mountains, but I prefer looking at the sea than mountains because the way the the sounds away so makes me so relaxed and chill out.

✓ Oh, I like both the sea and the mountains, but I prefer looking at the sea to the mountains because the sound of the waves relaxes me and helps me chill out.

Use 'prefer X to Y' not 'prefer X than Y'. Include articles: 'the mountains'. The phrase 'the way the the sounds away so makes me so relaxed' is incoherent; correct to 'the sound of the waves relaxes me.' Use singular verb 'relaxes' to agree with singular subject 'sound'. 'Helps me chill out' is clearer than 'makes me so relaxed and chill out.'