打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid filler words (e.g., "umm") and repetitive phrases. Also use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "warmer" rather than "more warm").

示例: I prefer handwriting because it feels warmer and more personal. For example, when I write a card by hand, the recipient can sense effort and individuality, which you don't get from a typed message.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific reason with improved grammar and vocabulary. Avoid unclear phrases like "the top is my study materials" and redundant words. Use a linking word to connect the reason.

示例: I type on a laptop every day because I keep my study materials on it and use it to take notes and research online. For instance, I open lecture slides and then type summaries while searching for additional sources.

建议: Start with a direct answer and give one specific detail. Correct grammar (past tense, subject-verb agreement) and clarify who "them" refers to. Use a linking word to make the sentence flow.

示例: I learned to type in elementary school when my father gave me my first mobile phone. He wanted me to message and call my relatives more easily, so I practiced typing to communicate with them.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific methods with linking words. Use correct verb forms and more precise phrasing (e.g., "I installed" not "I even install"). Avoid casual comparative comments unless relevant.

示例: I improve my typing by regularly messaging friends and by using a typing-practice app. For example, I installed a speed-typing app and complete timed exercises every day, which has noticeably increased my accuracy and speed.

× I prefer handwriting and this is because I think handwriting is more warm than typing and handwriting can send more feelings to others.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I think handwriting is warmer than typing and can convey more feeling to others.

Use comparative form 'warmer' rather than 'more warm' for the adjective warm; 'convey more feeling' is more natural than 'send more feelings.' Also remove redundant 'handwriting' repetition for conciseness. Suggestion: use adjective comparatives (warmer) and choose appropriate verbs (convey).

× But typing like umm, there's no emotions in there.

✓ But typing, um, has no emotion in it.

Original sentence is informal and ungrammatical. Use 'has no emotion in it' instead of 'there's no emotions in there' to match subject and avoid existential 'there is' with plural mismatch. Remove filler 'like' or use 'um' for hesitation. Use singular 'emotion' as an uncountable noun here.

× I type on a laptop keyboard every day and that is because the top is my study materials and I use laptop to type the information I need and search on the website for starting.

✓ I type on a laptop keyboard every day because I keep my study materials on it and I use the laptop to type the information I need and to search websites when I start studying.

Several problems: 'the top is my study materials' is incorrect—use 'keep my study materials on it'; 'use laptop' needs article 'the laptop'; 'search on the website for starting' is ungrammatical—use 'search websites when I start studying' or 'to start.' Maintain present tense consistent with habitual action. Suggest clearer word order and articles.

× So I use laptop.

✓ So I use the laptop.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'laptop'. English generally requires an article with singular countable nouns. Also 'So I use the laptop' completes the thought from the previous clause.

× I learned how to type on a keyboard when I was in elementary school and that's the time my dad gave me my first cell phone.

✓ I learned how to type on a keyboard when I was in elementary school; that's when my dad gave me my first cell phone.

Use 'when' instead of 'the time' for natural phrasing: 'that's when' links the events. Also a semicolon or conjunction improves sentence flow. Tense 'learned' is correct; this fixes sentence structure.

× He want me to message them and calling them more convenient.

✓ He wanted me to message them and call them more conveniently.

Subject-verb agreement: 'He want' should be 'He wanted' (past tense) to match 'gave' earlier. Also parallel structure requires base verb 'call' (not 'calling') after 'to'; 'more convenient' modifies an adjective for situations—use adverb 'more conveniently' to describe the manner. Suggest: 'He wanted messaging and calling them to be more convenient.'

× I improve my typing by messaging with my friends and I even install the app that I can practice my typing speed and now I'm faster than my friends.

✓ I improve my typing by messaging my friends, and I even installed an app where I can practice my typing speed, so now I'm faster than my friends.

Consistency in tense: 'I improve' (present) can be kept but mixing present and past is confusing; better to say 'I improve... and I even installed' or change to present perfect. Use 'messaging my friends' (no 'with'). 'Install' should be past 'installed' if referring to a completed action; or 'install' with present perfect. 'the app that I can practice my typing speed' is ungrammatical—use 'an app where I can practice my typing speed.' Also add commas for clarity.