打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence. Avoid repetition, filler words (uh, um), and unclear references (e.g. 'he'). Use linking words to add one or two specific reasons or examples. Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

示例: I prefer handwriting because it often feels more personal and expressive than typing. For example, a handwritten letter can show emotion through style and care, which makes it more meaningful to the receiver. However, I type for daily tasks because it is faster and more convenient.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid fillers and repetition. Give specific details (how often, what tasks) and use linking words (for example, because, so) to make the answer coherent. Mention the device briefly without unnecessary brand detail unless relevant.

示例: I usually type on a laptop every day because I use it for assignments and social media. For example, I spend about two hours daily writing essays and emailing classmates, and I also use it to chat on social platforms. This routine helps me keep my work organized.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence stating when you learned, then add a specific detail or short example. Avoid vague phrasing and improve grammar (tenses, articles). Use linking words like 'because' or 'since' to connect ideas.

示例: I learned to type when I was about 14 or 15 years old. My aunt taught me because keyboards are quite different from phone keypads, so she practiced with me until I became confident. Since then I have practiced regularly to improve my speed.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence describing your methods, then give specific examples and results. Use linking words (for example, additionally, because) and avoid repeating 'regular' twice. Mention measurable improvement if possible (e.g., WPM or faster completion time).

示例: I improved my typing through regular practice and by doing assignments on my laptop daily. Additionally, I worked as a data-entry clerk for six months, which helped increase my speed and accuracy. As a result, I can now type much faster and make fewer mistakes when writing documents.

× I usually prefer handwriting as it is very beneficial if if if he wants to send a letter or e-mail and the handwriting uh, inhibits more emotions than the typing 1 and the handwriting is as it is for the traditional way of transfer.

✓ I usually prefer handwriting because it is very beneficial if I want to send a letter or e-mail, and handwriting conveys more emotion than typing; handwriting is also the traditional way of sending messages.

The student used the wrong pronoun 'he' instead of 'I', causing a reference error (Incorrect use of pronouns). Also 'inhibits' is incorrect meaning; 'conveys' or 'expresses' is appropriate. The sentence was long and repetitive; it was clarified and combined for coherence. Suggestion: use the correct subject pronoun that matches the speaker and choose verbs with the intended meaning (e.g., 'conveys' instead of 'inhibits').

× On the regular basis, I type on a laptop, uh, whenever I want to make a make an assignment or to communicate with any other person through social media websites, I use that platforms on my laptop, which is of Apple company.

✓ On a regular basis, I type on a laptop whenever I need to do an assignment or communicate with other people through social media; I use those platforms on my Apple laptop.

Several problems: article and phrasing ('On the regular basis' -> 'On a regular basis'), repetition ('make a make an assignment'), incorrect quantifier/pronoun agreement ('any other person' -> 'other people'), incorrect demonstrative plural ('that platforms' -> 'those platforms'), and awkward brand phrase ('which is of Apple company' -> 'my Apple laptop'). These are primarily present-tense and article/pronoun issues. Suggestion: simplify phrases, ensure plural/singular agreement, and use natural collocations like 'do an assignment' and 'Apple laptop'.

× I vividly remember when I was around 14 to 15 years of age, my aunt taught me to use the alphabet on the keyboard as they are very different from the normal one in the mobile phones.

✓ I vividly remember that when I was about 14 or 15 years old, my aunt taught me to use the letters on the keyboard because they are very different from those on mobile phones.

Errors include awkward number range phrasing ('14 to 15 years of age' -> 'about 14 or 15 years old'), wrong noun choice ('alphabet' -> 'letters' or 'keys'), and incorrect demonstrative plural ('the normal one in the mobile phones' -> 'those on mobile phones'). The sentence mixes past remembering with present-state explanation; tense use is acceptable (past for learning, present for difference). Suggestion: use concise age expressions, correct nouns for keyboard elements, and matching demonstratives for plural nouns.

× So from that time onwards I repeatedly do that.

✓ Since then, I have practiced repeatedly.

Using 'do' with 'from that time onwards' is unnatural; continuous/perfect aspect is required to indicate an action started in the past and continued to the present. This is a present perfect/perfect continuous issue. Suggestion: use 'have practiced' or 'have been practicing' to show ongoing action from a past starting point.

× With the regular exercise and by making my assignments on my laptop on a regular basis, I was able to learn typing and improve my typing speed as well.

✓ With regular practice and by doing my assignments on my laptop regularly, I was able to learn to type and improve my typing speed as well.

Problems: redundant phrases ('regular exercise' -> 'regular practice'), awkward verb forms ('learn typing' -> 'learn to type'), and repetition ('on a regular basis' used twice). The correction uses the infinitive 'learn to type' which is grammatically correct. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use common collocations like 'learn to type' and 'regular practice'.

× In addition, I worked as a typing employee in a job for six months that helped me a lot.

✓ In addition, I worked as a typist for six months, which helped me a lot.

Awkward noun phrase 'typing employee in a job' should be 'typist' or 'data entry clerk'. Also clause connection: 'for six months that helped me a lot' is better as a non-restrictive relative clause 'which helped me a lot'. Tense is past and correct for a completed job. Suggestion: use the single-word occupation 'typist' and punctuate clauses clearly.