打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer нь ойлгомжтой бөгөөд шууд хариулсан байна. Гэхдээ үг давталт, үг завсарч байгаа (uh, umm) болон грамматикийн жижиг алдааг засах хэрэгтэй. Мөн нэг гол санааг дэмжих тодорхой жишээ эсвэл тайлбар өгөх. 3-4 өгүүлбэрт багтаан холбогч үг ашиглан логик байдлаар өрнүүлэхийг зөвлөж байна.

示例: I prefer handwriting to typing because it helps me remember information better. For example, when I take notes by hand I often recall the material more easily during exams. Therefore, I usually write important points by hand instead of typing them.

建议: Хариулт шууд боловч үг давтагдал, 'umm' зэрэг бөглөх үг их байна. Мөн 'in other hand' гэсэн илэрхийлэл буруу ашигласан байна. Илүү цэвэр, богино бөгөөд логик холбоос ашиглан (for example, at home/in the office) хариул. 2-3 өгүүлбэрт багтааж, үг давталтыг багасга.

示例: I use both. For example, I use a laptop at the office during the day, while I use a desktop at home in the evenings. So I switch between them depending on where I am.

建议: Хариулт тодорхой боловч цаг болон дүрэм зөрчих, 'assume' хэрэггүй хэрэглэгдсэн байна. Мөн олон 'uh' байна. Өгүүлбэрийн цаг, дүрмийг зөв хэрэглэж, товч тодорхой он/нас эсвэл үе зааж хэлэх. Холбогч үг ашиглаж нэг цэгт төвлөр.

示例: I learned to type about 19 years ago when I was a student and first started using a computer. At that time I taught myself the basic keys and practiced regularly.

建议: Санаа тодорхой боловч грамматик алдаа болон хэлцийн зохисгүй хэрэглээ байна (become more faster, I am using to). Явцад гарч буй үйл явцыг илүү тодорхой, тод жишээ (practice, online courses, exercises) оруулаарай. Харьцангуй 2-4 богино өгүүлбэр ашиглахыг зөвлөж байна.

示例: I improve my typing by practicing every day. For instance, I type long emails and reports at work and I also do online typing exercises to increase speed and accuracy.

× Personally, I prefer handwriting rather than typing because handwriting gives a cognitive, uh, effect and at the same time improves the brain, especially memorizing things.

✓ Personally, I prefer handwriting to typing because handwriting has a cognitive effect and at the same time improves memory, especially when memorizing things.

The phrase 'prefer handwriting rather than typing' is non-idiomatic; use 'prefer A to B'. 'Gives a cognitive effect' is awkward; use 'has a cognitive effect'. 'Improves the brain' is incorrect collocation; use 'improves memory'. This makes the sentence natural and grammatically correct in English. (In English: use 'prefer A to B', choose correct collocations like 'has a cognitive effect' and 'improves memory'.)

× I do use both of them. Umm for instance I just have a laptop at my office during the day I use that. But umm in other hand I do have a desktop computer in my place at home, so I'd use that.

✓ I use both. For instance, I have a laptop at my office that I use during the day. On the other hand, I have a desktop computer at home, so I use that there.

'I do use both of them' is acceptable but wordy; 'I use both' is clearer. 'I just have a laptop at my office during the day I use that' is a run-on and needs punctuation and relative clause: 'I have a laptop at my office that I use during the day.' 'In other hand' is incorrect; use 'on the other hand'. 'In my place at home' is awkward; use 'at home'. Also avoid repeating 'do' auxiliary unnecessarily. These changes correct pronoun reference and sentence structure.

× I assume it was around 19 years ago when I was a student, I, uh, started to use a computer. So at that time, uh, first I starts to use the keyboard.

✓ I think it was around 19 years ago when I was a student; I started using a computer then. At that time, I first started to use the keyboard.

'I assume' is better as 'I think' for recollection. 'I, uh, started to use a computer' is fine but needs punctuation. 'First I starts to use the keyboard' has incorrect verb form 'starts' (present) after past context; use past 'started'. Also 'started using' is a natural verb pattern. Ensure past tense consistency for past events.

× I type a lot, therefore my speed become more faster and I am using to type in different long texts, so I'm getting familiar with typing day by day.

✓ I type a lot, so my speed has become faster, and I'm used to typing long texts, so I'm becoming more familiar with typing day by day.

'My speed become more faster' mixes forms and comparative: use 'has become faster' or 'has improved'. 'More faster' is redundant; 'faster' alone is correct. 'I am using to type' is incorrect collocation; the correct phrase is 'I'm used to typing' (adjective 'used to' + -ing). 'Different long texts' is awkward; 'long texts' is sufficient. Maintain present perfect for change ('has become') and present progressive for ongoing process ('I'm becoming').