打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct errors (e.g., "eligible" -> "legible"), and avoid redundancy. Use one or two supporting details with linking words (for example, "because" or "so").

示例: I prefer typing on a desktop or laptop because it is faster and more convenient. For example, typing makes it easy to edit documents and share them between my computer and phone.

建议: Work on sentence fluency and accuracy, and reduce filler words. Start with a direct answer, then give two clear reasons using linking words like "because" and "also." Correct grammar (e.g., "it is quite quiet"; "it is not very noisy").

示例: Yes, I use a laptop every day because I work as a marketing executive and need to be mobile. Also, the office is quiet so the laptop is convenient, and the keyboard is comfortable for quick typing.

建议: Give a concise, chronologically clear response and correct tense/word order. Avoid repetition. Use a linking phrase to connect the event and its effect (e.g., "because" or "so").

示例: I learned to type when I was five, after my father gave me a new computer. As a result, I started practicing touch typing early and became quite confident using the keyboard.

建议: Focus on correct vocabulary and clearer structure. Use precise words (e.g., "improve speed and accuracy," "mechanical keyboard," "hand posture"). Limit to up to five sentences and use linking words like "for example" or "so."

示例: I improve my typing by practicing every day to increase speed and accuracy. For example, in high school I typed long essays at home, and using a mechanical keyboard helped me maintain proper hand posture and type more comfortably.

× I prefer typing on the desktop or laptop because it's more convenient and faster.

✓ I prefer typing on a desktop or laptop because it's more convenient and faster.

Use of the definite article 'the' before desktop and laptop is unnecessary when speaking generally. Use the indefinite article 'a' for general statements about any desktop or laptop. Suggestion: Use 'a desktop or laptop' for general preference.

× My handwriting is eligible and typing make it easy to edit and share documents on my phone on my computer.

✓ My handwriting is illegible, and typing makes it easy to edit and share documents on my phone or my computer.

'Eligible' is incorrect; the intended word is 'illegible' (adjective meaning hard to read). Subject-verb agreement: 'typing' is singular as a gerund and requires 'makes' not 'make'. Use 'or' to join phone and computer as alternative devices. Suggestion: Check similar-sounding words and ensure verb agrees with the gerund subject.

× Then I prefer use my laptop because it quite it quiet, it not very noise in my office and furthermore with the laptop keyboard I can touch with my fingertip easily.

✓ Then I prefer to use my laptop because it is quite quiet; it is not very noisy in my office, and furthermore, with the laptop keyboard I can type easily with my fingertips.

Multiple issues: missing 'to' after 'prefer' (verb pattern), missing auxiliary 'is' for descriptive clauses, incorrect adjective 'noise' used instead of adverb/adjective 'noisy', awkward word order 'touch with my fingertip' should be 'type with my fingertips'. Suggestion: Include infinitive 'to', use 'is' for descriptions, use 'noisy' for sounds, and place verbs and objects in natural order.

× To be honest, I'm a marketing executive so I need to use my laptop every day.

✓ To be honest, I'm a marketing executive, so I need to use my laptop every day.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs a comma before 'so' when joining independent clauses. Suggestion: Use proper punctuation to clarify compound sentence.

× Well, at five years old then the at that time, my father gifted me a new computer.

✓ Well, when I was five years old, my father gifted me a new computer.

Use 'when I was five years old' rather than 'at five years old then the at that time' which is redundant and ungrammatical. 'Gifted me' is acceptable past tense. Suggestion: Use a single time expression and correct word order.

× So I learned how I learned how to typing.

✓ So I learned how to type.

After 'learned how' use the base form 'to type' (infinitive) or 'type' without -ing. The sentence also repeats 'I learned how' unnecessarily. Suggestion: Remove repetition and use correct verb form.

× And you know, at that time I can touch typing with and it's really impressive.

✓ And you know, at that time I could touch type, and it was really impressive.

'Can' should be backshifted to 'could' to match past time context. 'Touch typing' is a noun phrase; use 'touch type' as the verb. Remove stray 'with'. Match tenses throughout the sentence. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when describing past events and correct verb form 'touch type'.

× To improve my typing, I practice day in and day out.

✓ To improve my typing, I practice day in, day out.

Original is acceptable but common fixed expression uses commas: 'day in, day out'. No tense change needed. Suggestion: Use idiomatic punctuation.

× When I was high school, I often type long documents at home to view speed and accuracy, and using a mechanic keyboard helped me maintain proper hand hosting, positioning, and type more comfortably.

✓ When I was in high school, I often typed long documents at home to improve my speed and accuracy, and using a mechanical keyboard helped me maintain proper hand positioning and type more comfortably.

Several corrections: add preposition 'in' for 'in high school'; past tense 'typed' to match 'when I was'; 'improve' instead of 'view' fits meaning; 'mechanic' should be adjective 'mechanical'; remove extra word 'hosting' and use 'hand positioning'; ensure parallel structure: 'helped me maintain ... and type' — keep verb forms consistent. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions, past tense consistency, correct vocabulary, and parallel structure.