打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g. "because", "however"). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "reach to like".

示例: I prefer handwriting for personal letters because it feels more personal and thoughtful. However, for work I usually type documents because typing is faster and produces a neater, more professional result.

建议: Remove hesitations and repetition. Give a direct topic sentence then add a brief reason using linking words (e.g. "because", "so"). Use correct verb forms and avoid saying the same word twice.

示例: I type on a laptop keyboard every day because my job requires me to work on a laptop. So I use the laptop keyboard for most tasks, such as emails and reports.

建议: Simplify and correct sentence structure. Start with a clear time reference, then give the relevant detail. Avoid repeating the same point.

示例: I learned to type when I was about nine years old. My father gave me a computer as a birthday present, and that gift helped me practice typing regularly.

建议: Be clearer about methods and use specific examples. Start with a direct statement about how you improved, then give one or two concrete ways and use linking words (e.g. "for example", "because"). Avoid filler words and repeating ages.

示例: My typing improved naturally as I used the computer a lot as a child. For example, when I was nine or ten I chatted with friends on Yahoo Messenger every day, which gave me lots of practice and helped increase my speed and accuracy.

× On the other hand, for my work, when I reach to like official letter for my work, I prefer typing.

✓ On the other hand, for my work, when I need to write an official letter for my job, I prefer typing.

The phrase 'reach to like' is incorrect; the proper verb is 'need' or 'have to' followed by 'to write'. Also 'official letter' requires an article 'an'. 'For my work' and 'for my job' are repetitive; choose one. Use 'job' to sound natural.

× Umm I usually type on keyboard umm keyboard, laptop keyboard because my job requires require me to work on computer or laptop.

✓ Umm I usually type on a laptop keyboard because my job requires me to work on a computer or laptop.

The verb 'requires' is correct for third person singular, but 'require' is erroneous duplication. Remove the extra 'require'. Add articles: 'a laptop keyboard' and 'a computer'. Keep subject-verb agreement with 'requires'.

× So every day I use laptop keyboard.

✓ So every day I use a laptop keyboard.

Countable singular nouns need an article. 'Laptop keyboard' should be 'a laptop keyboard' to be grammatically correct.

× I learned to type on a keyboard when I was about 9 years old and my father gave me a computer as my birthday gift.

✓ I learned to type on a keyboard when I was about nine years old, and my father gave me a computer as a birthday gift.

The sentence is mostly correct but style improvements: write numbers under ten as words, add a comma before the conjunction joining two independent clauses, and use 'a birthday gift' rather than 'my birthday gift' for natural phrasing.

× Nine years old's birthday gift and I learned to write type on a computer then.

✓ It was my ninth birthday gift, and I learned to type on the computer then.

The phrase 'Nine years old's birthday gift' is ungrammatical; use 'my ninth birthday gift'. Also 'learned to write type' is redundant and ungrammatical—use 'learned to type'. Add 'the' before 'computer' if referring to that specific computer.

× And my typing skills developed very naturally when I was a child.

✓ My typing skills developed very naturally when I was a child.

Starting with 'And' is informal and unnecessary. The verb tense 'developed' is past and fits the time reference; remove the leading conjunction for clarity.

× Umm, when I was 9 to 10 years old, about 9 to 10 years old.

✓ Umm, when I was about nine or ten years old.

Use 'about nine or ten years old' to express an approximate age. Avoid repeating the phrase; use words for numbers and the conjunction 'or' rather than 'to' for age ranges in casual speech.

× My friends use Yahoo Messenger to connect with each other, so I developed it.

✓ My friends used Yahoo Messenger to connect with each other, so I learned from them and practiced typing.

The original mixes present and past tenses—'use' should be 'used' to match the past context. 'I developed it' is vague; specify 'I learned from them and practiced typing' to show how the action improved your skills.