打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more fluent: begin with a direct topic sentence (e.g. “I prefer typing for work but handwriting for personal notes”), then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “however”). Avoid filler words and pronunciation mistakes (e.g. ‘tanking’ → ‘typing’). Keep it within 2–4 concise sentences.

示例: I prefer typing for work because I send many professional emails and need to be fast and tidy. However, for personal messages like birthday cards I usually handwrite them because they feel more personal and thoughtful.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence stating which you use daily, then support with concise reasons linked by words like “because” or “so”. Correct small errors (e.g. ‘resending’ → ‘because’, avoid fillers like ‘you know’). Two short sentences are enough.

示例: I type on a laptop keyboard every day because my job requires me to travel to meetings and seminars. So I usually carry my laptop and do most of my typing on it.

建议: Give a clear, simple answer with specific time reference and brief context. Remove hesitations and irrelevant technical terms (e.g. ‘IP setup’ unless relevant). Use linking words like “when” or “at” to make sequence clear. Keep to 1–2 sentences.

示例: I started learning to type in primary school, around the fourth or fifth grade, during a computer class. That was when a teacher showed us how to use the keyboard and practice basic typing.

建议: Answer with a clear topic sentence about your improvement methods, then give specific examples and link them (e.g. “for example”, “also”). Avoid vague phrases and filler words. Say concrete activities and frequency (e.g. daily practice, typing tests). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

示例: I improve my typing mainly by practicing every day because my job involves a lot of online chatting. For example, I set aside 15 minutes to do online typing exercises and I type all my emails and messages quickly to build speed and accuracy.

× Actually, it's got, uh, when it comes to my work, I prefer tanking because my talk will come in each other professional and I am supposed to write a lot of emails in my day-to-day.

✓ Actually, when it comes to my work, I prefer typing because most of my tasks are professional and I have to write a lot of emails day to day.

Original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect words ('tanking', 'my talk will come in each other professional') causing sentence structure problems. The corrected version replaces incorrect words with 'typing', clarifies the meaning with 'most of my tasks are professional', and simplifies 'in my day-to-day' to 'day to day' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb-object order and choose accurate vocabulary.

× But when it comes to, to write, uh, a birthday greeting or with someone and I would like to, you know, write it.

✓ But when it comes to writing a birthday greeting for someone, I would prefer to write it by hand.

Original has repetition, incorrect preposition use and unclear structure ('to write, uh, a birthday greeting or with someone'). The corrected sentence fixes structure by using the gerund 'writing' after 'comes to', uses 'for someone' instead of 'with someone', and clarifies preference 'prefer to write it by hand'. Suggestion: after 'when it comes to' use noun or gerund; keep prepositions appropriate.

× My shop requires me to carry laptops every day resending I have to travel for meetings and for seminars.

✓ My job requires me to carry a laptop every day because I have to travel for meetings and seminars.

Original uses 'shop' and plural 'laptops' incorrectly and contains 'resending' which is wrong. Subject-verb agreement and word choice errors: 'requires me to carry laptops' should be 'requires me to carry a laptop' if referring to one, and 'because' links clauses. Suggestion: use singular/plural consistently and connect clauses with proper conjunctions.

× I always carry my laptop and due to that I, you know, end up typing on laptop keyboard.

✓ I always carry my laptop and, because of that, I end up typing on the laptop keyboard.

Missing article before 'laptop keyboard' and awkward 'due to that' placement. Use 'because of that' or 'due to that' with proper punctuation, and include 'the' before 'laptop keyboard'. Suggestion: include articles where needed and place transitional phrases correctly.

× I remember I started learning people during my school days.

✓ I remember I started learning to type during my school days.

The phrase 'learning people' is incorrect; intended verb phrase is 'learning to type'. Also 'started learning' is correct past tense. Suggestion: ensure the verb complements express the intended action ('learn to type').

× Uh, maybe it was the 4th or 5th class.

✓ Maybe it was in the fourth or fifth grade.

'4th or 5th class' is nonstandard phrasing in English; 'grade' is the appropriate term and include the preposition 'in'. Suggestion: use 'in the fourth or fifth grade' for schooling years.

× There was uh, lecture on uh, uh, Internet and uh, IP setup during that class, uh, I learned how to type 1C.

✓ There was a lecture on the Internet and IP setup during that class, and I learned how to type properly.

Missing article 'a' before 'lecture' and missing 'the' before 'Internet' in this context; run-on sentence and unclear 'type 1C'. Replaced 'type 1C' with 'type properly' to reflect sensible meaning. Suggestion: include articles where necessary and avoid unclear abbreviations.

× Well, as of now, I have been, uh, excellent in my chatting, uh, because that's what my job requires me to do.

✓ Well, at the moment, I am good at chatting because that's what my job requires me to do.

'Have been excellent in my chatting' is awkward; use 'am good at chatting' to match present state. 'As of now' can be 'at the moment'. Suggestion: for current abilities use present simple or present continuous appropriately.

× However, I include my typing still, uh, through the practice on daily basis.

✓ However, I still improve my typing through daily practice.

Original uses incorrect verb 'include' and awkward phrase 'on daily basis'. Corrected to 'still improve my typing' and 'daily practice'. Suggestion: use 'daily' as adjective before 'practice' and choose verbs that convey intention ('improve' instead of 'include').

× I used to write the letters, emails, messages, everything on, uh, competition.

✓ I used to write letters, emails, and messages regularly as part of my routine.

'On competition' is incorrect and unclear. Also articles before plural nouns unnecessary. Rephrased to convey habitual writing. Suggestion: avoid literal translations; use 'regularly' or 'as part of my routine' to express frequency.