打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'efficient' twice) and incorrect comparisons ('more portable than'). Use correct pronouns and article forms.

示例: I prefer typing to handwriting because it’s faster and easier to organize my notes. For example, I can sync notes across my laptop and iPad, so I can access them anywhere; moreover, I can quickly search and share them with classmates.

建议: Give a direct answer then one clear supporting detail. Fix grammar (e.g., 'a portable keyboard is attached') and avoid unrelated or unclear comments ('make my hands flexible'). Use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: I use a laptop keyboard every day because my laptop is portable and the keyboard is built in. For instance, I can work on the sofa or take it to class, whereas a desktop setup is fixed and less convenient.

建议: Good clear timeline and context. Improve grammar and cohesion: start with a full sentence ("I learned to type when I was 12") and use past tense consistently. Reduce small filler words like 'yeah' and include a linking word to connect reasons.

示例: I learned to type when I was 12. After finishing primary school, I started middle school where a compulsory computer course taught everyone how to use the keyboard, so that’s when I began learning.

建议: Provide a concise topic sentence then two specific methods. Use natural collocations ("daily practice", "online courses") and avoid exaggerated words like 'perfectness'. Mention measurable improvements or frequency if possible.

示例: I improve my typing through daily practice and online courses. For example, I spend 20 minutes a day on speed drills and I completed an online touch-typing course to learn proper finger placement, which has increased my speed and accuracy.

× I prefer typing, yes, since typing I can take notes with my laptop or iPad.

✓ I prefer typing, because by typing I can take notes with my laptop or iPad.

The original uses 'since' awkwardly to mean 'because' and repeats 'typing' incorrectly. This is a sentence structure issue involving connective choice rather than a -ing form error; however it can be corrected by replacing 'since' with 'because' and reordering the phrase to 'by typing' to show means clearly. Suggestion: use 'because' for reasons and 'by + -ing' to express method (e.g. 'by typing I can...').

× They are very portable than notebooks and pens.

✓ They are much more portable than notebooks and pens.

Comparative structure 'more ... than' is required with countable plural noun 'notebooks and pens'. 'Very portable than' is incorrect. Use 'much more portable than' or 'more portable than' to compare. Also 'they' refers to 'laptop or iPad' (singular choices) so better to use 'both are' if referring to two items; here 'laptop or iPad' implies devices in general, so plural 'they' is acceptable when meaning 'these devices'.

× And typing makes my learning more efficient for the efficiency that I can share my notes with others.

✓ Typing makes my learning more efficient because I can share my notes with others.

The phrase 'for the efficiency that' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use a clear causal connector 'because' and avoid repeating 'efficient/efficiency'. Suggestion: express cause simply: '...more efficient because I can...'. Keep sentences concise.

× I tap on the laptop keyboard.

✓ I type on the laptop keyboard.

'Tap' is acceptable but uncommon for typing; more natural is 'type'. No third-person issue, but to match typical phrasing use 'I type on my laptop keyboard.' This keeps verb tense and person consistent.

× Yeah, since I have a laptop and there are a portable keyboard attached to it, so they are very convenient to use together.

✓ Since I have a laptop and a portable keyboard attached to it, they are very convenient to use together.

Original mixes singular/plural and uses 'there are' incorrectly. Use 'a portable keyboard attached to it' or 'one attached to it'. 'There are' is unnecessary. Also avoid starting a clause with 'so' after 'since' in the same clause. Suggestion: 'Since I have a laptop and a portable keyboard attached to it, they are convenient to use together.'

× And with keyboard I can make my hands flexible, but desktop's keyboard I can only use a mouse.

✓ With the keyboard I can make my hands more flexible, but with a desktop keyboard I can only use a mouse.

Missing articles: 'with keyboard' should be 'with the keyboard' or 'with a keyboard'. 'desktop's keyboard' is possessive and unnatural; use 'a desktop keyboard'. Also 'make my hands flexible' is odd; 'make my hands more flexible' or 'improve my finger dexterity' is clearer. Suggestion: include appropriate articles and parallel structure.

× Since the age of 12, yeah.

✓ Since the age of 12, yes.

This short fragment is acceptable as an informal reply. Change 'yeah' to 'yes' for formality. No 'there be' correction needed here, but keep concise replies.

× At that time I graduated from my primary school and entered my middle school, and there's a compulsory course about computer and everyone had to learn how to type on the keyboard.

✓ At that time I graduated from primary school and entered middle school, and there was a compulsory course about computers, so everyone had to learn how to type on the keyboard.

Tense consistency: 'there's' (there is) should be past 'there was' to match past context. Use plural 'computers' for the subject. Replace 'and' with 'so' to show result ('everyone had to...'). Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when describing past events.

× So I learned at that time.

✓ So I learned then.

Redundant 'at that time' after past context; 'then' is more natural. Maintain past tense 'learned'. Suggestion: keep concise: 'So I learned then.'

× By everydays practice, Yeah, I'm still practicing it.

✓ By daily practice. Yes, I'm still practicing it.

'Everydays' is ungrammatical. Use 'daily practice' or 'everyday practice' (adjective 'everyday'). Also separate informal 'Yeah' to 'Yes' for formality. Suggestion: use 'daily practice' or 'practice every day.'

× Now only with countless and continuous practice can I get perfectness in typing.

✓ Now only with countless and continuous practice can I achieve perfection in typing.

'Perfectness' is nonstandard; use 'perfection'. Word order of inversion 'Only with... can I...' is acceptable but formal. Alternatively: 'I can only achieve perfection in typing through constant, continuous practice.' Suggestion: use 'perfection' and 'constant/continuous practice.'

× And also I do some online learning course to learn some skills.

✓ I also take some online courses to learn skills.

'Do some online learning course' is ungrammatical. Use 'take' or 'enroll in' with plural 'courses' or 'an online course'. Remove redundant 'some' before 'skills' or specify which skills. Suggestion: 'I also take some online courses to learn skills' or 'I also take an online course to learn specific skills.'