打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more consistent in tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise reasons with linking words. Use specific phrasing (e.g., “when I’m working” not “when I was when I am”) and replace vague phrases like “any things” with concrete words such as “information” or “notes.” Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer typing for work because it’s faster and more efficient, but I handwrite notes when studying because writing by hand helps me remember information better.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence then add specific details. Correct grammar (e.g., “when I work,” “I work as a data processor”) and name applications accurately. Use linking words like “for example” to list tools. Keep sentences clear and concise.

示例: Yes, I type every day at work because I am a data processor. For example, I use applications such as Pentaho and Beaver to extract and transform data, so I spend most of my day typing on a desktop or laptop.

建议: Answer directly with correct tense and fewer hesitations. Provide one clear supporting detail (where or who taught you) and avoid repetition. Use articles correctly (“when I was a child,” “in elementary school”) and correct verb forms (“I went to Walnut and learned there”).

示例: I learned to type when I was a child in elementary school. Although there were no computers at home then, I went to a community center called Walnut where they taught basic keyboard skills.

建议: Give a clear main point and one or two specific methods. Use linking words (e.g., “by,” “for example,” “also”) and correct comparative structures (“the more I use… the more my typing improves”). Mention concrete practices such as timed exercises or typing software for stronger content.

示例: I improve my typing mainly by practicing every day: the more I use computers at work, the more my speed and accuracy improve. I also practice with online typing tests and focus on correcting mistakes to increase my accuracy.

× It depends on the activity. I prefer typing when I was when I am working because handwriting will be exhausting.

✓ It depends on the activity. I prefer typing when I am working because handwriting is exhausting.

The original mixes past ('was') and present ('am') incorrectly. Use present tense 'am' to match the general habitual situation. Also use 'is' instead of 'will be' to state a general truth. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for habitual preferences and facts.

× But when I am learning, I prefer handwriting because it helps me to remember any things if I write it.

✓ But when I am studying, I prefer handwriting because it helps me remember things if I write them.

Use 'studying' instead of 'learning' for describing active study context (both are possible but 'studying' is more natural); remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps' (use 'helps me remember'); 'anything/things' should be 'things' and match plural pronoun 'them' for 'things'. Also avoid 'it' for plural antecedent.

× Yes, I type on a desktop or laptop keyboard every day when I am work because I'm working as a data that's processing.

✓ Yes, I type on a desktop or laptop keyboard every day when I am working because I work as a data processor.

Use 'working' after 'am' or simply 'I work' for correct continuous/habitual expression. The job title was incorrect: 'data that's processing' is ungrammatical; correct noun is 'data processor'. Use consistent present simple or present continuous depending on habit; here present simple 'I work as' is appropriate.

× I use some applications such as Pentaho, the Beaver and Axles and I type on it every time I work.

✓ I use some applications such as Pentaho, Beaver, and Axles, and I type on them every time I work.

Use commas to separate items and remove definite article before software names. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'applications' (plural). 'Beaver' may be a product name; keep capitalization consistent. Also avoid repeating 'and' unnecessarily.

× I learned how to type on a keyboard when I was child in my elementary schools.

✓ I learned how to type on a keyboard when I was a child in elementary school.

Add article 'a' before 'child'. Use singular 'elementary school' for the general institution. 'Schools' plural is unnecessary unless you mean multiple schools.

× I remember I don't have any computers or laptop at that time, but I I I go to Walnut and learn from it.

✓ I remember I didn't have any computers or laptops at that time, but I went to Walnut and learned from it.

Because the memory refers to the past, use past tense: 'didn't have', 'went', 'learned'. Use plural 'laptops' for consistency with 'any'. Remove repeated filler 'I I I'. If 'Walnut' is a place or course name, 'learned from it' is acceptable; otherwise specify 'learned there'.

× I improve my typing just learning by doing.

✓ I improve my typing just by learning through practice.

Use 'by' before the gerund phrase and prefer 'learning through practice' or 'by practicing' for natural phrasing. 'Learning by doing' is acceptable but needs 'by' before phrase: 'I improve my typing by learning by doing' is awkward; better: 'I improve my typing by practicing'.

× The more often I use the computers, the more improve my typing too.

✓ The more often I use computers, the more my typing improves.

Correct comparative structure: 'the more... the more...' requires subject and verb in the second clause: 'the more my typing improves.' Also remove definite article before 'computers' unless referring to specific computers.

× And now I work and use laptop every day.

✓ And now I work and use a laptop every day.

Add article 'a' before 'laptop' for correct noun phrase. Present simple 'work' and 'use' are fine for habitual actions.