打字— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce fillers (uh, um) and avoid repetition.

示例: I prefer typing to handwriting because most of my work is on a laptop. For example, I use online forms and CRM systems at my job, so typing is faster and more efficient. However, I still write by hand when I need to take quick notes or sketch ideas.

建议: Answer directly and clearly, using one strong sentence followed by a short explanation. Correct grammar (e.g., "my office allotted me a laptop"), avoid fillers, and use linking words like "because" or "so" for coherence.

示例: I use a laptop keyboard every day because my office provided a laptop and all our CRM systems are installed on it. Therefore, I do almost all my tasks on the laptop, from emails to data entry.

建议: Organize chronologically with clear time markers and correct tense. Begin with a topic sentence (when you learned), then explain progression and give a specific result (current speed). Avoid hesitation markers.

示例: I learned to type in college, initially on a typewriter. Later, I practiced on a computer keyboard when I started using PCs, and now my typing speed is about 40 words per minute.

建议: Be concise and specific: state the main method you use to improve, give one or two concrete strategies and use linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea multiple times.

示例: I improve my typing mainly by daily practice at work since most tasks require fast typing. Additionally, I use online typing exercises twice a week to work on accuracy and speed.

× so my most of the work is on laptop.

✓ so most of my work is on the laptop.

Word order and determiners: 'most of the work' should be 'most of my work' to show possession, and 'on laptop' requires the article 'the' because we refer to a specific device used for work. Improve by placing the possessive before 'most' and adding 'the' before 'laptop'.

× So that's why I work, uh, most of the time I do typing and handwriting also some plays the most important role in my life.

✓ So that's why I work most of the time; I do both typing and handwriting, and handwriting also plays an important role in my life.

Run-on sentence and word order: The original combines clauses incorrectly and misplaces 'some'. Break into clear clauses, use a semicolon or period, add 'both' for two items, and place 'plays an important role' after the subject 'handwriting'.

× My offers uh allotted me a laptop.

✓ My office allotted me a laptop.

Wrong word: 'offers' is incorrect when meaning 'office'. Use the correct noun 'office'. Also remove filler 'uh'. Proofread to choose the intended pronoun/noun.

× My whole work is on the laptop, so mostly I use laptop keyboard because see umm all the CRMS of my office is inbuilt in the in that laptop.

✓ All my work is on the laptop, so I mostly use the laptop keyboard because all the CRMs of my office are built into that laptop.

Article and subject-verb agreement: Use 'all my work' or 'all the work' and 'the laptop keyboard'. 'CRMs' is plural so use 'are' not 'is'. Use 'built into' rather than 'inbuilt in the in that'. Remove fillers. Ensure consistent articles before nouns.

× When I was, uh, at my college, I learned to, I learned typing on the, uh, typewriter.

✓ When I was at college, I learned to type on the typewriter.

Verb form: Use 'learned to type' (infinitive) not 'learned typing' in this context. Remove unnecessary commas and fillers; 'at my college' can be 'at college' but either is acceptable.

× And then I'll practice.

✓ And then I practiced.

Tense inconsistency: The student is narrating past events, so use past tense 'practiced' rather than future 'I'll practice'. Keep narrative tense consistent.

× I start practicing on uh, computer keyboard and now my speed is 40 per minute.

✓ I started practicing on the computer keyboard, and now my speed is 40 words per minute.

Tense and article: Past action should be 'started' to match learning in the past. Add 'the' before 'computer keyboard' and clarify 'words per minute'. Remove filler 'uh'.

× As I mentioned above, I already learned at my college time and by the time when I joined an organization and my whole of the work is on laptop daily by practicing daily and working on daily purposes on the laptop.

✓ As I mentioned above, I learned in college, and when I joined the organization all my work was on the laptop, so I improved by practicing and using it every day.

Preposition and phrasing: Use 'in college' not 'at my college time'. 'When I joined the organization' is the correct clause. 'All my work' is better than 'my whole of the work'. Simplify 'practicing daily and working on daily purposes' to 'practicing and using it every day'. Ensure past tense consistency.