视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve clarity and grammar, use a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details (max 4 sentences). Correct mistakes (e.g., “hear” → “cherish” or “recall”, “edit the using an app” → “edit them using an app”), and add a linking word when giving an example. Also replace vague phrase “good memories” with specific phrase like “memories of the place” and avoid redundancy.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views because they help me remember a place clearly. For example, when I visit a forest or a city viewpoint, I usually take several photos and then edit them using an app to highlight colours. This also makes me notice small details I would otherwise miss.

建议: Provide a clearer topic sentence, fix grammar (use articles and plural forms), and use linking words to compare (e.g., "however", "whereas"). Avoid repetitive closing sentence; instead summarize preference or say you enjoy both for specific reasons. Be specific about what you enjoy (e.g., architecture, city lights, wildlife).

示例: I enjoy both urban and rural views for different reasons. In urban areas, I like the architecture and tall skyscrapers, whereas in rural areas I appreciate the peace, wildlife and forests. Therefore, I choose based on whether I want excitement or tranquillity.

建议: Clarify your point and correct grammar (e.g., "many countries has" → "my country has", "fascinating ways" → "fascinating landscapes/views", "each ways" → "each way"). Start with a clear topic sentence stating preference, then give specific contrasts and use linking words (e.g., "however", "also"). Avoid vague phrases like "make me feel new" — say "make me feel refreshed or inspired."

示例: I appreciate views both in my own country and abroad because each offers something different. In Thailand, I enjoy diverse landscapes from beaches to mountains, whereas in countries like the UK I love the historic architecture and misty countryside. Both types of views inspire me in different ways.

× I enjoy taking photographs in different places because I like to hear good memories on my phone.

✓ I enjoy taking photographs in different places because I like to hear good memories on my phone.

No correction needed for verb form here. 'Enjoy taking' and 'like to hear' are acceptable. However, 'hear good memories on my phone' is odd semantically but not a grammar error in the listed types; consider 'listen to recordings of memories' for clarity.

× For example, if I visit a forest or a city viewpoint, I usually take several pictures and edit the using an app.

✓ For example, if I visit a forest or a city viewpoint, I usually take several pictures and edit them using an app.

The pronoun 'them' is required to refer back to 'several pictures'. Omission of the object pronoun makes the sentence ungrammatical. Use 'edit them' or 'edit the pictures'.

× I find it interesting because it helps me notice more detail.

✓ I find it interesting because it helps me notice more details.

'Detail' can be countable in this context; 'more details' is the natural plural when referring to individual aspects. This fits the intended meaning.

× If I visit urban area, I find it interesting because I can see many skyscrapers.

✓ If I visit an urban area, I find it interesting because I can see many skyscrapers.

The noun phrase requires an article: 'an urban area' (singular countable noun). Omitting the article is a grammatical error.

× On the other hand, if I go to a rural area, I can enjoy nature, animals and forests.

✓ On the other hand, if I go to a rural area, I can enjoy nature, animals, and forests.

This sentence is grammatically correct; only a comma was added for list punctuation. No listed grammar-type error otherwise.

× Both are appealing to me in there.

✓ Both are appealing to me there.

The preposition 'in' before 'there' is redundant and incorrect. Use 'there' alone to indicate location: 'appealing to me there'.

× I would say I prefer both as many countries has a variety of fascinating ways in many parts of Thailand.

✓ I would say I prefer both, as many countries have a variety of fascinating places, and Thailand has many interesting regions.

Several issues: subject-verb agreement 'countries has' should be 'countries have' (plural subject with plural verb). The phrase 'fascinating ways' is incorrect; likely 'fascinating places' or 'sights'. Also the original mixes 'many countries' with 'in many parts of Thailand' awkwardly; sentence was rephrased for clarity while fixing grammar.

× At the same time I also enjoy seeing view in other countries like the UK.

✓ At the same time, I also enjoy seeing views in other countries, like the UK.

'View' should be plural 'views' when speaking generally. Also 'in other countries' is correct but needs plural noun. Added commas for clarity.

× It makes me feel new and different.

✓ It makes me feel refreshed and different.

Grammatically the original is acceptable, but 'feel new' is unnatural. Replacing with 'feel refreshed' keeps intended meaning. This is a word choice issue rather than a strict grammar type from the list, but improvement suggested.

× I find both enjoyable in each ways.

✓ I find both enjoyable in each case.

'Each ways' is ungrammatical: 'each' cannot modify plural 'ways' in this construction. Use 'each way' or better 'each case'. The correction matches natural English.