视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar errors (e.g., remove duplicated words) and finish your thought. Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve special moments. For example, when I travel I photograph landscapes and cityscapes so I can revisit those memories later. These photos often cheer me up when I feel nostalgic.

建议: Correct word choice and remove repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then add specific reasons with linking words (e.g., because, and, for example). Keep it natural and under five sentences.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they feel more natural and peaceful. For example, the fresh air and abundant trees create calming scenery, and the quieter environment helps me relax.

建议: Avoid word mistakes (videos → views) and remove repeated fragments. Provide a clear topic sentence and then 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, so). Combine short fragmented sentences into coherent ones and finish with a brief example or result.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because the scenery and atmosphere feel new to me. For instance, seeing different architecture and landscapes abroad inspires me and gives me fresh ideas for photography.

× For example, when I travel, I photograph I photograph landscapes and cityscapes so I can look back at them later, and they often cheer me up when I.

✓ For example, when I travel, I photograph landscapes and cityscapes so I can look back at them later, and they often cheer me up.

This sentence contains a repeated verb 'I photograph I photograph' and ends with an incomplete clause 'when I.' The issue falls under sentence structure errors (ID 26). Remove the duplicate verb and the incomplete trailing clause to make the sentence grammatically complete and coherent. Suggestion: read sentences aloud to catch repetitions and ensure every clause is complete.

× I prefer abuse and rural rural areas because they are more beautiful and feel more natural.

✓ I prefer urban and rural areas because they are more beautiful and feel more natural.

The student wrote 'abuse' and duplicated 'rural rural.' This is a word choice/typo and repetition error falling under sentence structure errors (ID 26) and article/word use. Replace 'abuse' with 'urban' to contrast with 'rural' and remove the duplicate 'rural.' Suggestion: check for typos that change meaning and avoid duplicate words when speaking or writing.

× I prefer videos in other country because in our country I I am used to it.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because in our country I am used to them.

Errors include 'videos' instead of 'views' (word choice), 'other country' should be plural 'other countries' to match general preference, and 'I I' is a repetition. Also 'it' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'views.' These are singular/plural and pronoun agreement issues (ID 1 and 12). Use plural nouns when speaking generally and ensure pronouns agree in number. Remove repeated words.

× I and I want a new scenery.

✓ I want a new scene.

The phrase 'I and I' is a repetition and 'a new scenery' is awkward; 'scenery' is generally uncountable, so use 'a new scene' or 'new scenery' without 'a.' This is a sentence structure and article/word choice issue (ID 26 and 22). Use appropriate countable/uncountable nouns and avoid repeating the subject.

× I want to see a new view or the atmosphere there.

✓ I want to see a new view and experience the atmosphere there.

Using 'or' between 'a new view' and 'the atmosphere' weakens the connection; 'the atmosphere there' is acceptable but 'experience the atmosphere' is clearer. This is an article/word choice and sentence structure issue (ID 22 and 26). Use verbs that fit the noun (experience atmosphere) and link ideas with 'and' when both are intended.

× I want to feel something new. That's it.

✓ I want to feel something new.

'That's it' is conversational but unnecessary; not a grammatical error, but earlier repetition 'I I' appears before. Keep concise: 'I want to feel something new.' Issue classified as sentence structure/repetition (ID 26). Avoid filler phrases unless needed for tone.