视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and complete sentences; avoid fillers and finish thoughts. Start with a clear topic sentence, add one or two specific supporting details and a brief reason. Use linking words and correct grammar (e.g., complete the object of “sharing”).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I photograph landscapes and city scenes to preserve memories and show friends and family on social media. As a result, I can easily recall the atmosphere of each place.

建议: Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., “rural” not “lure”; plural forms). Give one clear reason and a brief example using linking words. Keep to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences and avoid sentence fragments.

示例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy natural scenery such as rivers and majestic mountains. Moreover, rural places are usually more peaceful and relaxing than cities, so I feel refreshed when I take photos on hiking trips.

建议: Make the sentence structure smoother and avoid repetition of “like.” Provide a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example (e.g., architecture or festivals) and a concise reason. Use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they feel more exotic and offer different architectural styles. For instance, I love photographing historic temples and colorful markets abroad, which helps me learn about new cultures and styles of design.

× And I also really enjoy sharing those pictures with my.

✓ And I also really enjoy sharing those pictures with my friends.

The sentence ends with the possessive pronoun 'my' but lacks a noun to complete the phrase. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (type 12). Use a noun after the possessive pronoun (e.g., 'friends') or replace 'my' with the object pronoun 'me' if intended. Suggestion: say 'with my friends' or 'with others.'

× Personally I prefer the lure area.

✓ Personally, I prefer the rural area.

The word 'lure' is incorrect in context; the intended adjective is 'rural.' This is a lexical/adjective error (type 13). Also add a comma after the introductory adverb 'Personally.' Suggestion: use 'rural area' to refer to the countryside.

× I really like natural scenery like rivers or majestic mountains.

✓ I really like natural scenery, such as rivers or majestic mountains.

The sentence is understandable but slightly awkward. Replacing 'like' with 'such as' makes the examples clearer and more formal. This is an article/phrase clarity issue (type 22). Also add a comma before the example phrase. Suggestion: use 'such as' for examples.

× And it's much more peaceful and relaxing than urban area.

✓ And it's much more peaceful and relaxing than an urban area.

When comparing to a countable noun phrase 'urban area,' an article is required. This is an article error (type 22). Alternatively, use 'urban areas' for a general comparison: 'than urban areas.' Suggestion: use 'an urban area' or 'urban areas.'

× And I always feel refreshed when I take photo of.

✓ And I always feel refreshed when I take photos.

The fragment 'take photo of' is incomplete and lacks the correct noun form and object; it's a sentence structure issue (type 23). Use the plural 'photos' and drop the unnecessary preposition 'of.' If a specific object is needed, say 'take photos of the scenery.' Suggestion: 'take photos' or 'take photos of the scenery.'

× I actually prefer views in other countries because it's more exotic and exciting for me and I always like to experience new culture and like appreciate different types of architecture.

✓ I actually prefer views in other countries because they are more exotic and exciting to me, and I always like to experience new cultures and appreciate different types of architecture.

Multiple issues: 'it's' (it is) wrongly refers to plural 'views'—subject-verb agreement/pronoun reference problem (type 27 and 12). Use 'they are' for plural. 'New culture' should be plural 'new cultures' to match 'other countries' and general meaning (quantifier/adjective use, type 14/13). Also remove the extra 'like' before 'appreciate' to avoid redundancy (sentence structure/type 26). Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents, use plural nouns when speaking generally, and avoid duplicating 'like.'