视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and reduce hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and filler words. For example, mention one favourite subject (sunsets) and one specific technique or reason (capturing colours after rain, close-ups of leaf textures).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs. For example, I often shoot sunsets and sunrises because the light after rain creates rich colours, and I also take close-up shots of leaves to capture their intricate textures.

建议: Give a clear preference sentence, then support it with two concise, specific reasons linked logically. Remove fillers and keep sentences short (max 4–5). Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' correctly.

示例: I prefer rural views because the sky often appears more dramatic there, especially at sunrise and sunset. I also like rural scenes because they offer detailed textures, such as the delicate patterns on leaves, which make interesting close-ups.

建议: State your preference clearly, then explain with specific emotional and sensory reasons. Use correct grammar for tense and articles, and avoid vague phrases like 'very good' or 'in abroad'. Add one comparative detail about foreign scenes to balance the answer.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and often evoke pleasant childhood memories. However, I also enjoy scenes abroad because their novelty—different landscapes and colours—gives me fresh inspiration for photography.

× I enjoy taking pictures and I love to do it.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures and I love doing it.

When combining 'love' with an activity already expressed as a gerund ('taking'), it is more natural and consistent to use the gerund form 'doing' rather than the infinitive 'to do'. Use 'love doing' to show enjoyment of an ongoing activity.

× I used to take pictures of sunset, of sun rising, especially the sky after rain.

✓ I used to take pictures of sunsets and sunrises, especially the sky after rain.

When referring to these phenomena in a general habitual sense, use plural 'sunsets' and 'sunrises'. Also use 'and' to connect items of the same category. Plural forms correctly indicate repeated occurrences.

× And I also used to capture the pictures of trees and the leaves, specifically the the details of leaves.

✓ I also used to capture pictures of trees and leaves, specifically the details of the leaves.

Do not use 'the pictures' when speaking generally; use 'pictures'. 'The the' is a typo duplicated article. Use 'the leaves' when specifying particular details; otherwise 'leaves' is fine. Correct article use improves clarity.

× I I, I, I used to.

✓ I used to.

Repeating 'I' is a disfluent speech pattern; in written correction keep a single subject. This fixes sentence structure and avoids redundancy.

× I prefer views in rural areas more because I feel that in rural areas, the sky look more dramatic than the urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I feel that, in rural areas, the sky looks more dramatic than in urban areas.

Use 'looks' (third person singular) for subject-verb agreement. Use 'in urban areas' to parallel 'in rural areas' and avoid redundant 'more' after 'prefer'. Also include commas for clarity.

× I also, uh, love to uh, capture pictures of sunset and sun rising.

✓ I also love to capture pictures of sunsets and sunrises.

Use plural 'sunsets' and 'sunrises' for general habits. The verb 'love' is fine but avoid extra fillers. Consistent plural nouns improve naturalness.

× I used to take picture of the delicate or the intricate designs or the texture of leaves.

✓ I used to take pictures of the delicate or intricate designs and the textures of leaves.

Use plural 'pictures' and plural 'textures' when speaking generally. Remove unnecessary repeated 'the' and use 'and' to connect related nouns for better flow.

× I really prefer views in my own country because it makes me feel very familiar to my surrounding and it also evoked my childhood memories.

✓ I really prefer views in my own country because they make me feel very familiar with my surroundings and they also evoke my childhood memories.

Use 'they' to refer back to 'views' (plural). Use 'make' and 'evoke' to match plural subject. The correct preposition is 'familiar with' and use plural 'surroundings'. Use present tense 'evoke' if speaking generally about a present reaction.

× However, I will also feel very good about the scenes in abroad because it has its own novelty.

✓ However, I also feel very good about scenes abroad because they have their own novelty.

Use present simple 'feel' for general preference. Say 'scenes abroad' (no 'in') and use plural pronoun 'they' with 'have' to agree. 'Its' should match plural 'scenes' so use 'their'. 'Abroad' does not take 'in'.

× it has its own novelty.

✓ they have their own novelty.

Referring to 'scenes' (plural) requires plural pronouns 'they' and 'their' and plural verb 'have' for subject-verb agreement.