视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more fluent. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetition, and add one supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct grammar (e.g. "remind me of"). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially when I'm on vacation. For example, I often photograph landscapes so that, when I return home, the photos remind me of the places and feelings I experienced.

建议: Provide a clear opinion sentence, explain reasons with linking words, and use correct vocabulary (e.g. "urban areas," "lighting" or "city lights"). Avoid sentence fragments and be specific about what you like in the city.

示例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the energy and architecture of cities. For instance, city lights and modern buildings create dramatic scenes at night, unlike rural views which are peaceful but more familiar to me.

建议: Answer directly, correct grammar and complete your thought. Explain why foreign views appeal to you with a specific reason and a linking phrase. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they feel new and exciting to me. For example, unfamiliar architecture and different street scenes make travel photos more interesting than the familiar views at home.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially when I'm on a vacation. After. After, when I come back to my reality, I can easily remind how.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially when I'm on vacation. Afterwards, when I return to reality, I can easily remember how it looked.

The original contains fragmented sentences and awkward phrasing. 'on a vacation' is less natural than 'on vacation' (article error and idiom). 'After. After,' is a fragment and should be combined into 'Afterwards' (sentence structure). 'come back to my reality' is unnatural; 'return to reality' is the correct idiom. 'remind how' is incorrect because 'remind' requires an object and 'remember' is the intended verb. Use 'remember how it looked' to complete the thought. Suggestions: combine fragments into full sentences, use natural idiomatic expressions, and choose the correct verb ('remember' not 'remind').

× I think I prefer views in urban area.

✓ I think I prefer views in urban areas.

The noun 'area' should be plural here because the speaker means urban places in general ('urban areas'). This is an adjective/noun agreement and pluralization issue. Suggestion: use the plural 'areas' when speaking about types or categories of places in general.

× I personally like. The feeling when I was in the rural areas such as like mountains or beaches, but the view of the urban city like lightning.

✓ I personally like the feeling when I am in rural areas, such as mountains or beaches, but I also like the view of the city at night with its lights.

Original has sentence fragments ('I personally like.'), tense inconsistency ('when I was' should be general/present: 'when I am'), unnecessary filler words ('such as like'), and an unclear phrase 'urban city like lightning' likely intended as 'city lights' or 'lighting at night'. Suggestions: avoid fragments, keep tense consistent for general preferences (present simple), remove redundant words, and use clear nouns ('city lights').

× I think I prefer views in other countries actually. Well in the views in my country is like too familiar for me.

✓ I think I prefer views in other countries, actually. The views in my country are too familiar to me.

'in the views in my country is' has subject-verb disagreement and awkward pronoun/structure. 'views' is plural so use 'are' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27) and say 'too familiar to me' instead of 'for me'. Also remove redundant prepositions. Suggestions: match plural subject with plural verb and use the correct preposition 'to' with 'familiar'.

× I always see that few, but when I was in when I mean other countries, all of the buildings.

✓ I always see them often, but when I am in other countries, all the buildings look different.

The original is fragmented and unclear: 'I always see that few' is ungrammatical and vague; 'when I was in when I mean other countries' repeats and mixes tenses; 'all of the buildings' is a fragment. Correct by using clear pronouns ('them' referring to familiar views), present tense for general statements ('I am'), and completing the clause ('look different'). Suggestions: avoid repetition, use complete clauses, keep consistent tense for habitual statements, and ensure each sentence has a clear subject and verb.