视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organize the response with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., use singular/plural correctly and past tense consistently). Use linking words such as “then” or “after that” sparingly and accurately to improve coherence.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, recently I was at a park with friends when a couple asked me to take their photos, so I used their phone and took several attractive shots; they were very impressed. This incident made me realize how much I enjoy capturing candid moments.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give one clear reason and a specific example. Remove filler words (“uh”, “so yeah”) and correct small errors (e.g., “a mix of both rural and urban” and “a couple of portraits”). Use a linking phrase like “for example” to connect the reason and the example.

示例: I prefer photographing urban areas because they often combine architectural features and natural scenes. For example, I frequently visit Scarborough nearby, where I take portraits against city backdrops that include parks and historic buildings.

建议: Give a clear direct answer, then one concise reason with specific details. Avoid repeating phrases and correct grammar (e.g., “I prefer views in other countries because I have visited many places in my own country” and “I was unable to visit many places because I was busy with my studies and job”). Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use linking words like “because” or “as a result”.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I’ve already seen many places in my own country. For instance, since I moved here for my studies I’ve been busy with coursework and work, so I haven’t had much time to travel domestically, which makes exploring foreign landscapes more appealing.

× I took a beautiful pictures and they were impressed.

✓ I took a beautiful picture and they were impressed.

The noun 'pictures' is plural but is modified by 'a', which requires a singular noun. Use 'a picture' for one photo or remove 'a' to say 'beautiful pictures'. Ensure article and noun number agree. Suggestion: Decide singular or plural: 'a beautiful picture' or 'beautiful pictures.'

× I prefer taking pictures in the urban areas because it is a mix of both rural and city area.

✓ I prefer taking pictures in urban areas because they are a mix of both rural and city areas.

Articles are used incorrectly. 'Urban areas' and 'city areas' are general plural nouns that do not need 'the'. Also pronoun agreement: 'it is a mix' refers to plural 'areas', so use 'they are a mix'. Ensure noun number matches pronoun. Suggestion: Use no article for general plural nouns and match verb to plural subject.

× I used to take couple of, uh, portraits.

✓ I used to take a couple of portraits.

'Couple' as an amount requires the determiner 'a' when meaning 'a small number'. Also 'portraits' plural is fine. Missing 'a' causes ungrammatical noun phrase. Suggestion: Use 'a couple of' when referring to a small number.

× I prefer, I prefer views in other countries because I have visited many places in my country.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I have visited many places in my own country.

Using 'my country' can be ambiguous; 'my own country' sounds more natural to emphasize contrast with other countries. This is a style/pronoun clarity issue rather than strict grammar, but improves clarity. Suggestion: Use 'my own country' to contrast with 'other countries.'

× So that's why I came here for studies.

✓ So that's why I came here to study.

'Came here for studies' is awkward collocation. Use 'to study' to express purpose. The tense (past) is fine but verb form should be infinitive for purpose. Suggestion: Use 'to study' or 'for my studies.'

× And then after studies, I could not able to visit that much places because I was quite occupied with my, uh, job learning and uh.

✓ And after my studies, I could not visit that many places because I was quite occupied with my job and learning.

'Could not able to' is incorrect: combine either 'could not' or 'was not able to.' Also 'that much places' is ungrammatical; use 'that many places' for countable nouns. Word order and article: add 'my' before 'studies' and include 'and' between 'job' and 'learning.' Suggestion: Use 'could not visit' or 'was not able to visit' and 'that many places' for countable nouns.