视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce hesitations (“uh”), make a clear topic sentence, and add one specific example with linking words. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Use varied but natural vocabulary (e.g., “wildlife,” “landscapes”).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of nature, especially wildlife and landscapes. For example, last spring I photographed a family of deer near a riverbank, which helped me remember the colors and mood of that morning. I find that photographing details like light and texture makes the scenes more memorable.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence, correct minor grammar (e.g., “in a remote area,” “different types”), and use one linking phrase to give a reason and an example. Be specific about what you like in rural views.

示例: I prefer rural views because I live in a remote area surrounded by varied plants and trees. For instance, I enjoy photographing misty fields at dawn since the soft light and quiet atmosphere help me relax.

建议: Give a direct answer, avoid filler phrases (“I think I really”), and add a brief reason and a specific future plan using linking words (e.g., “however,” “in the future”). Keep language precise.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because there are many landscapes I haven’t explored yet. However, in the future I would like to travel abroad to photograph coastal scenery and historic cities to broaden my portfolio.

× I am fond of taking pictures of nature and uh, different variety of flora and fauna in the natural habitat.

✓ I am fond of taking pictures of nature and different varieties of flora and fauna in their natural habitat.

'Different variety' is incorrect; use plural 'different varieties' when referring to more than one kind. Also 'the natural habitat' is better as 'their natural habitat' to match 'flora and fauna'. Use of -ing 'taking' is correct.

× I am fond of taking pictures of nature and uh, different variety of flora and fauna in the natural habitat.

✓ I am fond of taking pictures of nature and different varieties of flora and fauna in their natural habitat.

The article 'the' before 'natural habitat' suggests a single specific habitat; 'their natural habitat' correctly refers back to flora and fauna. Also 'different variety' needs plural 'varieties'.

× I feel like uh, capturing memories of different things helps us to relive the actual moments.

✓ I feel like capturing memories of different things helps us relive the actual moments.

The verb phrase 'helps us to relive' is acceptable but more natural without 'to': 'helps us relive'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Tense and meaning remain present.

× I usually prefer views in rural areas as personally I live in a remote side area where we can see a different types of plants and trees.

✓ I usually prefer views in rural areas because I personally live in a remote area where we can see different types of plants and trees.

'a remote side area' is awkward; use 'a remote area'. 'different types' requires removing 'a' before 'different'. Also 'as personally' is nonstandard; 'because I personally' is clearer.

× I usually prefer views in rural areas as personally I live in a remote side area where we can see a different types of plants and trees.

✓ I usually prefer views in rural areas because I personally live in a remote area where we can see different types of plants and trees.

Replace 'in a remote side area' with 'in a remote area'. 'Because' is a better conjunction than 'as' here. Preposition 'in' is fine; main issue was phrasing.

× Also these views helps me to reduce my stress whenever I'm stressed.

✓ Also these views help me reduce my stress whenever I'm stressed.

Subject 'these views' is plural, so use plural verb 'help' not 'helps'. Omitting 'to' after 'help' is more natural. Repetition 'reduce my stress whenever I'm stressed' is redundant but acceptable; could be simplified to 'help me relax when I'm stressed.'

× I think I really prefer views in my own country because I feel like there are many different types of views and places that I have not seen yet, but in future I would really love to see other things too.

✓ I think I prefer views in my own country because there are many different types of views and places I have not seen yet, but in the future I would really love to see other places too.

Remove redundant 'really' for clarity. 'In future' should be 'in the future'. 'Other things' is vague; 'other places' fits the context. Tense and aspect remain present/future as appropriate.