视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện sự tự nhiên và lưu loát bằng cách giảm các tiếng ồn (uh, um) và tránh lặp từ. Trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó dùng 1–2 câu bổ sung với chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại cảnh bạn thích, lý do, thiết bị bạn dùng). Sử dụng liên từ và cụm từ liên kết (for example, because, so) một cách chính xác để câu mạch lạc. Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I especially like seaside scenes because the colors and light are very striking. For example, I often use my phone to capture sunsets and the reflections on the water so I can look back on those moments later.

建议: Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (it is a → it is). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ. Thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn và dùng từ vựng miêu tả hơn (tranquil, scenic, countryside). Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

示例: I prefer rural views because the countryside is peaceful and scenic. The fresh air and birdsong help me relax after a busy week. For example, I often walk through rice fields to enjoy the quiet and take photos.

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và rõ ràng ý bằng cách tổ chức câu: nêu quan điểm, giải thích lý do, rồi đưa ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh dùng từ mơ hồ như 'real' mà nên giải thích rõ (authentic, familiar, culturally significant). Sửa ngữ pháp và trật tự từ (many places in Vietnam are recognized by UNESCO). Giữ 2–3 câu, tránh lặp từ (I like).

示例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel more authentic and familiar to me. For example, many sites in Vietnam are recognized by UNESCO, so I enjoy visiting and exploring those cultural landscapes.

× I like taking picture of different views because when I see, uh, the beautiful seas, I, uh, I usually take photos with my phone so I can remember it later, for example, For example, I often photograph sunsets or.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because when I see the beautiful sea, I usually take photos with my phone so I can remember them later. For example, I often photograph sunsets.

Student used 'taking picture' (singular) where the correct gerund phrase requires the plural 'pictures' after 'taking'. Also 'seas' should be 'sea' in this context and 'remember it' should agree with plural 'photos' so use 'remember them'. Use 'photograph sunsets' to complete the example. Suggestion: use 'taking pictures of' + plural noun when talking about multiple photos, ensure pronoun agrees in number with antecedent and complete sentence ideas.

× I prefer the views of rural areas because it is really a It is really peaceful and beautiful.

✓ I prefer the views of rural areas because they are really peaceful and beautiful.

Subject 'the views of rural areas' is plural, so the verb and pronouns must be plural: use 'they are' rather than 'it is'. Remove repetition 'It is really a'. Suggestion: identify the grammatical subject (views) and match verb number and pronouns accordingly.

× For example, I really enjoy the sound of birds or the fresh air of rural.

✓ For example, I really enjoy the sound of birds and the fresh air in the countryside.

Using 'of rural' is incorrect; 'rural' is an adjective and needs a noun like 'countryside' and the correct preposition is 'in'. Also 'or' separates items incorrectly when both are enjoyed; use 'and'. Suggestion: pair 'in' with place nouns (in the countryside, in rural areas) and use nouns after adjectives.

× I prefer the views of my country because they are real.

✓ I prefer the views of my country because they feel more authentic.

'They are real' is grammatically possible but 'real' is vague; better to use 'they feel more authentic' to express preference. This corrects nuance rather than strict grammar; it also keeps pronoun 'they' matching 'views'. Suggestion: choose precise adjectives and ensure pronouns match their antecedents.

× There are many place of Vietnam where I live are reunited by UNESCO so I can so I like I like see sightseeing them.

✓ There are many places in Vietnam where I live that are recognized by UNESCO, so I like to visit and see them.

Several errors: 'place' should be plural 'places'; use 'in Vietnam' not 'of Vietnam'; 'reunited by UNESCO' is incorrect collocation — use 'recognized' or 'listed by UNESCO'; 'so I can so I like I like see sightseeing them' is ungrammatical: use 'so I like to visit and see them' or 'so I enjoy sightseeing there'. Suggestion: ensure noun number agreement, use correct verbs collocations (recognized/listed by UNESCO), and use infinitive 'to visit' after 'like' when indicating preference, plus place pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'places'.