视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid filler words (e.g., “uh,” “maybe”). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (types of subjects, purpose) and finish with a brief reason or example. Keep it under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I mainly shoot both landscapes—such as clouds and rural scenes—and portraiture of people. I once considered starting an Instagram portfolio to showcase my portraits, but my current job schedule leaves me little time to edit and post regularly.

建议: Answer directly with a topic sentence stating preference, then give specific supporting details (what makes rural views attractive, an example of a kept photo). Avoid repetitions and correct basic grammar (e.g., 'aesthetic' usage, 'computer').

示例: I prefer views in rural areas. I find rural scenes more aesthetic and full of traditional details like old houses and fields, which remind me of home. For example, I keep a framed photo of my village on my desk to reconnect with those memories when I study at my computer.

建议: Structure the reply: state your main preference, then give clear reasons with specifics. Avoid vague phrases and grammatical errors (e.g., 'end age'). Mention budgeting more clearly if relevant. Keep it to two or three sentences.

示例: I generally prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and meaningful to me. However, I also travel to neighboring countries occasionally for different landscapes and because travel costs can be lower, which helps me manage my limited budget.

× I love taking pictures and I rate myself as a professional photographer because I take both portraits and landscape of uh, clouds or maybe persons.

✓ I love taking pictures and I consider myself a professional photographer because I take both portraits and landscapes of clouds or people.

The phrase 'rate myself' is unnatural; 'consider myself' is appropriate. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match 'portraits' (parallel plural nouns). 'Persons' is formal and odd here; 'people' is the normal collocation. Use of 'because I take both portraits and landscapes of clouds or people' keeps grammatical parallelism and correct noun choice.

× Even I thought of opening uh Instagram account for portraits but then my work is too hectic so I could not able to spend time.

✓ I even thought of opening an Instagram account for portraits, but my work is too hectic so I could not find the time.

Article 'an' is required before 'Instagram account' (article error type ID 22 but instruction restricts to listed types; main fix uses verb + -ing and other corrections). 'I could not able to' is incorrect; use 'could not' or 'was not able to.' 'Find the time' is the natural phrase rather than 'spend time.' Also move 'even' to 'I even thought' for natural word order.

× I prefer to watch views in rural areas especially the subject is too aesthetic and also traditional and I have kept few pictures inside my room and I'm from rural area so I want to get those memories again.

✓ I prefer looking at views in rural areas, especially because the scenery is very aesthetic and traditional. I have kept a few pictures in my room, and since I'm from a rural area I want to recall those memories.

'Prefer to watch views' is unnatural; 'prefer looking at views' or 'prefer views' is better (verb+ing). 'The subject is too aesthetic' is awkward: 'the scenery is very aesthetic' or 'very picturesque' fits. 'Too' implies excess; use 'very.' 'Few' without article implies almost none; 'a few' means some. 'Inside my room' -> 'in my room.' 'I want to get those memories again' -> 'recall those memories.' These changes correct word choice and adjective/adverb usage.

× So I often keep a picture near me at my comput.

✓ So I often keep a picture near me at my computer.

'Comput' is a misspelling of 'computer' (spelling error). 'Near me at my computer' is acceptable: 'near me' and 'at my computer' are redundant; better: 'I often keep a picture on my computer near me.' Fixing preposition and spelling yields a clear sentence.

× I prefer both, I always prefer my country first but when I'm bored of looks then I go and visit my neighbor countries and also maybe abroad where the currency is cheaper because right now I'm earning very little so I have to save a lot at the end age.

✓ I prefer both. I always prefer my country first, but when I am tired of familiar scenery I visit neighboring countries or sometimes travel abroad where the cost of living is lower, because right now I earn very little so I have to save a lot for old age.

Run-on sentence and awkward phrases cause tense and word choice issues. 'Bored of looks' is incorrect: use 'tired of familiar scenery' or 'bored with the sights.' 'Go and visit' -> 'visit.' 'Neighbor countries' -> 'neighboring countries.' 'Maybe abroad' -> 'sometimes travel abroad.' 'Where the currency is cheaper' -> 'where the cost of living is lower.' 'At the end age' is ungrammatical; 'for old age' or 'for my old age' is correct. Maintain present tense 'I earn' and 'I have to save.' These corrections improve tense consistency and clarity.