学校— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors and awkward phrases. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence stating the location and name of your school, followed by a brief comment about it. Avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are coherent.

示例: My school is Hanoi University of Science and Technology, which is one of the top universities in Hanoi. I feel proud to study there because it has a strong academic reputation.

建议: Your answer shows enthusiasm but is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing and grammar mistakes. Try to give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons using linking words to improve coherence.

示例: Yes, I really like my school because it has excellent facilities. For example, the classrooms and library are modern and comfortable, which makes studying enjoyable.

建议: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples, using linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I believe my school is a great place to study because it offers high-quality education and attracts students from different countries, which creates a diverse learning environment.

建议: Your answer is fragmented and unclear. Focus on describing the environment clearly and coherently. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details about the natural surroundings and social atmosphere.

示例: The environment at my school is very pleasant because there are many trees and green spaces around the campus. Additionally, I have many friends in my classes, which makes the atmosphere friendly and welcoming.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and lacks coherence. Clearly state your opinion on the importance of interest in study, then explain how it affects your own study habits with specific examples, using linking words to organise your response.

示例: I believe that having an interest in what you study is very important. For instance, I plan my daily schedule around subjects I enjoy, which helps me stay motivated and complete my tasks effectively.

× Now I get a sass to learning journey in Hanoi University of Science Technologies, which is a top writing university in handle an I think it's our mission is so comparatively competitive.

✓ Now I am starting a learning journey at Hanoi University of Science and Technology, which is a top-ranking university in Hanoi, and I think its mission is very competitive.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'get a sass to learning journey' which is unclear and grammatically incorrect. The verb phrase should be in the present continuous tense 'am starting' to indicate an ongoing action. Also, 'Hanoi University of Science Technologies' should be 'Hanoi University of Science and Technology'. The phrase 'top writing university in handle' is incorrect and should be 'top-ranking university in Hanoi'. The sentence structure and word choice need correction for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Now I get a sass to learning journey in Hanoi University of Science Technologies, which is a top writing university in handle an I think it's our mission is so comparatively competitive.

✓ Now I am starting a learning journey at Hanoi University of Science and Technology, which is a top-ranking university in Hanoi, and I think its mission is very competitive.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'Hanoi University of Science Technologies'; the correct preposition is 'at' when referring to attending a university. Also, 'in handle' is incorrect; it should be 'in Hanoi' to indicate location.

× Now I get a sass to learning journey in Hanoi University of Science Technologies, which is a top writing university in handle an I think it's our mission is so comparatively competitive.

✓ Now I am starting a learning journey at Hanoi University of Science and Technology, which is a top-ranking university in Hanoi, and I think its mission is very competitive.

The pronoun 'our' is incorrectly used when referring to the university's mission. It should be 'its' to correctly refer to the university as a singular entity.

× So I feel so great going starting at the school.

✓ So I feel so great starting at the school.

The phrase 'going starting' is redundant and incorrect. The verb 'starting' alone correctly expresses the action. 'Going' should be removed to improve grammatical correctness and clarity.

× Definitely just I'm I'm a big fan of my school so I said it goes when I was a kid to join you get assessed to the school.

✓ Definitely, I am a big fan of my school. I said it goes back to when I was a kid and joined the school.

The phrase 'I said it goes when I was a kid to join you get assessed to the school' is confusing and contains incorrect pronouns and verb forms. 'You get assessed' is incorrect and should be replaced with 'I joined'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× Ann Well, when coming just go, the infrastructure is so top notch and I feel so, so well coming when commuter school.

✓ And well, when coming here, the infrastructure is top-notch and I feel very welcome when I come to school.

The preposition 'when coming just go' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'when coming here' or 'when I come here'. Also, 'commuter school' is incorrect in this context and replaced with 'come to school'. The phrase 'feel so, so well coming' is corrected to 'feel very welcome' for proper expression.

× As I mentioned with you that my school is a greatest university in Hanover, so definitely that my school is a good place to study not only for me but also foreign student from others other high school.

✓ As I mentioned to you, my school is the greatest university in Hanoi, so definitely my school is a good place to study not only for me but also for foreign students from other high schools.

The word 'student' should be plural 'students' to agree with 'foreign'. Also, 'others other high school' is incorrect and should be 'other high schools'. 'Hanover' is corrected to 'Hanoi' to match the context.

× As I mentioned with you that my school is a greatest university in Hanover, so definitely that my school is a good place to study not only for me but also foreign student from others other high school.

✓ As I mentioned to you, my school is the greatest university in Hanoi, so definitely my school is a good place to study not only for me but also for foreign students from other high schools.

The preposition 'with' is incorrectly used with 'mentioned'; the correct preposition is 'to'. Also, 'from others other high school' is incorrect; it should be 'from other high schools'.

× Regarding the nature, I think it's a wealth of trees are built around my school and feel so I feel so great when half the green environment around me.

✓ Regarding nature, I think there are a lot of trees around my school and I feel great with the green environment around me.

The phrase 'it's a wealth of trees are built' is grammatically incorrect and awkward. It should be 'there are a lot of trees'. Also, 'half the green environment' is incorrect and replaced with 'with the green environment'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Regarding the MD class. I have also. I have have. A lot of friends and also the infrastructure in Manatee is so.

✓ Regarding my classes, I also have a lot of friends, and the infrastructure is very good.

'MD class' is unclear and likely meant to be 'my classes'. The phrase 'I have have' is a repetition error. 'Infrastructure in Manatee is so' is incomplete and unclear; corrected to 'the infrastructure is very good'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× Regarding the MD class. I have also. I have have. A lot of friends and also the infrastructure in Manatee is so.

✓ Regarding my classes, I also have a lot of friends, and the infrastructure is very good.

The preposition 'in Manatee' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or misspelling. It should be omitted or corrected to the intended location. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I think it's based on the personal interest. For me, I I also said ago and also build my schedule in the morning and center and then I do a job, I mean the task. Ally and what I want in this day, in that day.

✓ I think it is based on personal interest. For me, I also set goals and build my schedule in the morning and afternoon, and then I do the tasks I want to complete that day.

The phrase 'I also said ago' is incorrect and should be 'I also set goals'. 'Build my schedule in the morning and center' is unclear; 'center' is corrected to 'afternoon'. 'Do a job, I mean the task. Ally' is confusing and corrected to 'do the tasks'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct pronoun and verb usage.