学校— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as 'is was located' and awkward phrasing like 'within a working reserve of my house'. Try to give a clear, direct answer with correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and natural. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add a supporting detail if necessary.

示例: My school was located near my house, so I usually walked there. Although it was convenient, sometimes the route was crowded because we lived in the city centre.

建议: Your answer has many hesitations and unclear phrases, which affect the natural flow. Try to speak more fluently and organise your ideas clearly. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Also, be specific about why you liked your school.

示例: Yes, I liked my school because I made many friends there. We were quite lively and often made the teachers laugh, which made the atmosphere enjoyable.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as 'I call that on that time' and 'study to school'. Try to use correct tenses and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: I don't think my school was a good place to study because it didn't have a library. Therefore, we had to take notes and study at home instead.

建议: Your answer provides relevant details but has grammatical errors and some repetition, such as 'wasn't clean at all, weren't clean at all'. Try to organise your answer logically and use correct grammar. Use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

示例: The environment at my school was poor. We lacked good quality equipment and facilities. For example, the restrooms were often dirty, the windows were broken, and the heater was usually off.

建议: Your answer shows good ideas but is incomplete and contains repetition and grammatical errors. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to explain your points logically.

示例: I believe interest is very important in study because it motivates children to learn. When they are interested in a subject, they work harder and set clear goals to achieve their dreams.

× My school is was located within a working reserve of my house during school time.

✓ My school was located within a walking distance from my house during school time.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'is was' which is a redundancy and incorrect past tense usage. The correct past tense verb is 'was'. Also, 'working reserve' seems to be a mishearing or typo; the correct phrase is 'walking distance'. This correction ensures proper past tense and correct phrase usage.

× My school is was located within a working reserve of my house during school time.

✓ My school was located within walking distance from my house during school time.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition to indicate proximity is 'from' when referring to distance between two points.

× I went to school on foot so it was really uncomfortable for me to go there and since we live in the city center we had access to all the schools.

✓ I went to school on foot, so it was really uncomfortable for me to go there, but since we lived in the city centre, we had access to all the schools.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation and conjunction usage. 'So' and 'since' are used without commas, and 'and since' should be connected with 'but' to show contrast. Also, 'live' should be past tense 'lived' to match the past context.

× since we live in the city center we had access to all the schools.

✓ since we lived in the city centre, we had access to all the schools.

The verb 'live' should be in past tense 'lived' to maintain consistency with the past time frame of the sentence.

× Yes, during school time, I made a lot of uh, friends.

✓ Yes, during school time, I made a lot of friends.

The filler words 'uh' are unnecessary and disrupt the sentence flow. Removing them improves clarity and sentence structure.

× So uh, it was really enjoyable.

✓ So, it was really enjoyable.

The filler 'uh' is unnecessary and should be removed for clearer and more formal speech.

× We I recall that we were we all of us were, umm, handful and we made a lot of noise, which is the professor and laugh out loud and we had a very long time during that time, so I liked.

✓ I recall that we were all quite handful and made a lot of noise, which made the professor laugh out loud. We had a very good time during that period, so I liked it.

The original sentence is fragmented and confusing with repeated words and filler sounds. The correction restructures the sentence for clarity, removes fillers, and corrects awkward phrasing.

× which is the professor and laugh out loud

✓ which made the professor laugh out loud

The phrase 'which is the professor and laugh out loud' is incorrect. The correct form is 'which made the professor laugh out loud' to indicate cause and effect properly.

× I call that on that time we hadn't any library, so I thought that it wasn't good enough to study well.

✓ I recall that at that time we didn't have any library, so I thought that it wasn't good enough to study well.

'I call that' is incorrect; the past tense 'I recall' fits better. 'Hadn't any library' is incorrect; the correct negative form is 'didn't have any library'.

× We made notes of our subjects and we had to study at home rather than study to school.

✓ We made notes of our subjects and had to study at home rather than study at school.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect after 'study'; the correct preposition is 'at' when referring to studying at a place.

× During elementary and middle school, we hadn't enough equipment with good quality, you know, we didn't have any facilities and the restroom wasn't clean at all, weren't clean at all.

✓ During elementary and middle school, we didn't have enough good quality equipment, you know, we didn't have any facilities and the restrooms weren't clean at all.

'Hadn't enough equipment' is incorrect; the correct negative form is 'didn't have enough equipment'. Also, 'restroom wasn't clean' and 'weren't clean' is inconsistent; plural 'restrooms weren't clean' is correct.

× the restroom wasn't clean at all, weren't clean at all.

✓ the restrooms weren't clean at all.

The sentence incorrectly switches between singular and plural forms. It should consistently use plural 'restrooms weren't clean' if referring to multiple restrooms.

× And the windows glasses was always broken and the heater was always off so.

✓ And the window glasses were always broken and the heater was always off.

'Windows glasses' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' not 'was'. This corrects subject-verb agreement.

× How important is interest in study?

✓ How important is interest in studying?

The phrase 'interest in study' is awkward; the correct form is 'interest in studying' using the gerund form after 'in'.

× I believe that is so important because it's to make children more motivated when they interest interested in learning a specific subject.

✓ I believe that it is very important because it makes children more motivated when they are interested in learning a specific subject.

The sentence has incorrect word forms: 'it's to make' should be 'it makes', and 'interest interested' is incorrect; 'are interested' is correct. Also, 'so important' is better as 'very important' in formal speech.

× So they put their put their force to learn it and they set a clear goal to accomplish their dream when they.

✓ So they put their effort into learning it and set clear goals to accomplish their dreams.

The phrase 'put their put their force' is repetitive and incorrect; 'put their effort into learning' is correct. Also, 'set a clear goal' should be plural 'set clear goals' to match 'dreams'. The sentence was incomplete and has been completed for clarity.