学校— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时应更自然地组织句子，避免信息堆砌。可以先直接回答学校位置，再补充学校名称和知名度。

示例: My school is located in Shanghai. It is called the Central Academy of Fine Art and is very famous in China.

建议: 回答过长且缺少连贯的连接词，建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并适当分句。

示例: Yes, I like my school because it has many facilities such as libraries and canteens. Moreover, the environment is pleasant for both students and teachers, and the people are very friendly.

建议: 句子结构不完整，缺少主谓一致，建议注意语法并丰富细节。

示例: Yes, I think my school is a great place to study because it has many modern facilities. Additionally, the green and friendly environment makes studying enjoyable for everyone.

建议: 句子结构混乱，缺少连贯性，建议分句并使用连接词，注意语法。

示例: There is an artificial lake called Dishy Lake, which is very beautiful and large. The water is blue, and there are many flowers, trees, and other plants around it.

建议: 回答较好，但用词重复，建议使用更丰富的词汇表达相同意思。

示例: In my opinion, interest is the best motivator for studying because when you are passionate about a subject, you have the enthusiasm and energy to learn and improve in it.

× My school is located in Shanghai called Central Academy of Fine Art and is very famous in China.

✓ My school, called Central Academy of Fine Art, is located in Shanghai and is very famous in China.

原句中“called Central Academy of Fine Art”位置不当，导致句子结构混乱。应将学校名称用逗号隔开，作为插入语放在主语后，使句子更通顺。

× Yes, there are a lot of facilities like libraries and canteens and also the environment is nice for students and teachers to study and work and the people there are very friendly.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of facilities like libraries and canteens. Also, the environment is nice for students and teachers to study and work, and the people there are very friendly.

原句过长且连接词使用不当，导致句子结构混乱。应拆分为多个句子，使用合适的连接词，使表达更清晰。

× We all happy to study and live here.

✓ We are all happy to study and live here.

句子缺少系动词“are”，导致谓语不完整。应加上“are”构成完整的现在时态句子。

× While there is an artificial lake called Dishy lake is very beautiful and big and the water is blue and also there are many flowers, trees and the other plants.

✓ There is an artificial lake called Dishy Lake, which is very beautiful and big. The water is blue, and there are also many flowers, trees, and other plants.

原句结构混乱，使用了不恰当的连接词“While”，且句子过长。应拆分句子，使用定语从句和合适的连接词，使表达更清晰。

× While there is an artificial lake called Dishy lake is very beautiful and big and the water is blue and also there are many flowers, trees and the other plants.

✓ There is an artificial lake called Dishy Lake, which is very beautiful and big. The water is blue, and there are also many flowers, trees, and other plants.

“Dishy lake”中的“lake”应大写且前面不加定冠词“the”，因为这是专有名词。

× How important is interest in study?

✓ How important is interest in studying?

“interest in study”中“study”应使用动名词形式“studying”，表示对学习的兴趣。

× In my opinion, I think interest is the best teacher for study because if you are interested in something, you have the passion and energy to study it and improve this thing.

✓ In my opinion, I think interest is the best teacher for studying because if you are interested in something, you have the passion and energy to study it and improve it.

“best teacher for study”中“study”应改为动名词“studying”。“improve this thing”表达不自然，应改为“improve it”指代前文内容。