学校— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 동사 시제와 전치사를 정확히 사용하세요. 예를 들어, 'My school is located in Xinjiang and is called Yunxi University. We arrive at Xinjiang station and walk about 15 minutes to get to school.'처럼 말할 수 있습니다.

示例: My school is located in Xinjiang and is called Yunxi University. We usually arrive at Xinjiang station and walk about 15 minutes to get there, which takes a bit of time.

建议: 답변이 중복되고 명확하지 않습니다. 간결하게 주제를 명확히 하고, 구체적인 이유를 덧붙여 보세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I like my school because I have worked hard to get in, and I am proud to be a student here.'

示例: Yes, I like my school because I have worked hard to get in, and I am proud to be a student here.

建议: 답변이 다소 중복되고 연결어 사용이 부족합니다. 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하고, 구체적인 예시를 추가하세요. 예를 들어, 'Absolutely, my school is a good place to study because it has many libraries and quiet study areas. Moreover, it offers diverse educational programs, giving students many learning opportunities.'

示例: Absolutely, my school is a good place to study because it has many libraries and quiet study areas. Moreover, it offers diverse educational programs, giving students many learning opportunities.

建议: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 내용이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하게 하고, 구체적인 환경 설명을 포함하세요. 예를 들어, 'My favorite place is the Business School building because it has many chairs and desks for studying, comfortable bean bags to relax, and a nice bakery.'

示例: My favorite place is the Business School building because it has many chairs and desks for studying, comfortable bean bags to relax, and a nice bakery.

建议: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 관심의 중요성을 명확히 표현하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예를 들어, 'I think having interest in studying is very important because it helps students stay motivated and study for a long time.'

示例: I think having interest in studying is very important because it helps students stay motivated and study for a long time.

× My school located in Xinjiang and that name is Yunxi University.

✓ My school is located in Xinjiang and its name is Yunxi University.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'school' which is necessary for correct sentence structure. Also, 'that name is' should be 'its name is' to correctly refer to the school. Adding 'is' and changing 'that' to 'its' corrects the sentence structure and pronoun usage.

× Uh, so we like arrived at Xinjiang station and walking like 15 minutes to go to our school.

✓ Uh, so we arrived at Xinjiang station and walked about 15 minutes to go to our school.

The verb 'arrived' should be in past tense to match the action completed in the past. 'Walking' should be changed to 'walked' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'like' is unnecessary and 'about' is a better quantifier than 'like' in this context.

× So a little bit take a long time to walk.

✓ So it takes a little bit long time to walk.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb agreement. Adding 'it takes' provides a subject and verb, making the sentence complete and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I like my school because this school is my favorite and I tried 4 * 4 years to come here.

✓ Yes, I like my school because this school is my favorite and I tried for 4 years to come here.

The phrase '4 * 4 years' is unclear and incorrect. It should be 'for 4 years' to indicate the duration of effort. Also, 'tried to come here' is acceptable but 'tried for 4 years to come here' is clearer.

× Absolutely, uh, here is good to study because so many libraries and places to study silently and they provide diverse education in here.

✓ Absolutely, uh, this place is good to study because there are so many libraries and places to study quietly, and they provide diverse education here.

'Here is good to study' is awkward; 'this place is good to study' is clearer. 'So many libraries' needs 'there are' to indicate existence. 'Study silently' should be 'study quietly' as an adverb. 'In here' is redundant; 'here' suffices.

× So I most like places in my school is the Business School business building.

✓ The place I like most in my school is the Business School building.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and redundancy. 'I most like places' should be 'The place I like most'. 'Business School business building' is repetitive; 'Business School building' is sufficient.

× So there have so many there is so many chairs and desks to learn and also there have bad and bin bag to rest.

✓ There are so many chairs and desks to study, and also there are beds and bean bags to rest.

'There have' is incorrect; the correct form is 'there are' for plural nouns. 'Bad' is a typo for 'bed'. 'Bin bag' should be 'bean bag'. The sentence needed correction for verb agreement and word choice.

× Also that business building have a good bakery.

✓ Also, that business building has a good bakery.

'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject 'business building'. Adding a comma after 'Also' improves readability.

× I think interest in study is so important source to study long term.

✓ I think interest in studying is a very important source for long-term study.

'Interest in study' should be 'interest in studying' to use the gerund form. 'So important source' needs an article 'a' and an adverb 'very' for emphasis. 'To study long term' should be 'for long-term study' for correct preposition and adjective use.

× So if they know don't have a interest about the studying, they can't do long time.

✓ So if they do not have an interest in studying, they can't study for a long time.

'They know don't have' is incorrect; it should be 'they do not have'. 'A interest' should be 'an interest' due to vowel sound. 'About the studying' should be 'in studying'. 'Do long time' is unclear; 'study for a long time' is correct.

× So absolutely they need uh like something interest or something like when they studying.

✓ So absolutely, they need something interesting or something like that when they are studying.

'Something interest' should be 'something interesting' to use the correct adjective form. 'When they studying' needs auxiliary verb 'are' to form present continuous tense. Adding 'like that' clarifies the meaning.