学校— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid unnecessary words like 'fortunately' and specify the distance more clearly (e.g., '5 minutes' instead of '5m'). Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: My school is in my hometown, just a five-minute walk from my home, so it's very easy for me to get there.

建议: Your answer covers good points but needs better sentence structure and linking words. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'has' instead of 'is having') and connect your ideas with words like 'also' or 'in addition'. Be specific about what makes the facilities good.

示例: Yes, I like my school very much because it has a beautiful playground where many games are played. In addition, there is a well-equipped auditorium with air conditioning and modern computer labs. We also have a canteen that serves delicious food.

建议: Your answer needs clearer structure and completion. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons why the staff and principal make the school a good place to study.

示例: Yes, I believe my school is a great place to study because it has well-trained and experienced teachers. Moreover, the principal is very skilled and knowledgeable, which helps maintain a high standard of education.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition (e.g., 'environment' used twice) and by using linking words to connect ideas. Also, be more specific about what makes the environment motivational and fresh.

示例: The environment at my school is beautiful and inspiring. We have many talented students who make the school proud. Additionally, the campus is surrounded by greenery, providing fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and correct grammar. Avoid vague words like 'lightful delighted' and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to explain why interest is important and how it affects the future.

示例: I believe having interest in studies is very important for building a successful career. If we study without interest, it is hard to achieve good results. Therefore, to have a bright future, we should work hard and develop our interest in learning.

× Yes, I am really fond of my school because it is having a beautiful ground where a lot of games can be played.

✓ Yes, I am really fond of my school because it has a beautiful ground where a lot of games can be played.

The phrase 'it is having' is incorrect because 'have' as a stative verb is not used in the present continuous tense. Instead, the simple present 'has' should be used to indicate possession or characteristics.

× Besides that it has a good auditorium with beautiful air conditions, computer labs.

✓ Besides that, it has a good auditorium with beautiful air conditioning and computer labs.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation and uses 'air conditions' incorrectly. 'Air conditioning' is the correct term for the system that cools the air. Also, a comma after 'Besides that' improves clarity.

× Also we have one canteen where delicious food.

✓ Also, we have one canteen where delicious food is served.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding 'is served' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning. A comma after 'Also' improves readability.

× Yes, my school is a very good place to study because of well trained and experienced staff The principal uh here is also very talented with a lot of skills and knowledge.

✓ Yes, my school is a very good place to study because of well-trained and experienced staff. The principal here is also very talented with a lot of skills and knowledge.

The original sentence is a run-on without proper punctuation. Adding a period separates the two ideas. Also, 'well trained' should be hyphenated as 'well-trained' when used as an adjective before a noun.

× So yes, I think it is a very good place to study and prove your.

✓ So yes, I think it is a very good place to study and prove yourself.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the reflexive pronoun 'yourself' after 'prove' to make sense.

× We have a lot of talented students which make our school proud and stand out among other schools.

✓ We have a lot of talented students who make our school proud and stand out among other schools.

'Which' is incorrectly used for people here; 'who' is the correct relative pronoun when referring to people.

× Besides that, the environment is quite fresh with fresh air and steady environment.

✓ Besides that, the environment is quite fresh with fresh air and a stable atmosphere.

The phrase 'steady environment' is awkward; 'stable atmosphere' is more appropriate. Also, repeating 'environment' is redundant.

× I think interest in study is very important for our own career and good future, because if we study anything without interest it does not pays off and I think for a fruitful and lightful delighted future we should work hard and improve our interest in.

✓ I think interest in study is very important for our own career and good future, because if we study anything without interest it does not pay off and I think for a fruitful and delightful future we should work hard and improve our interest in it.

'Does not pays off' is incorrect; the verb after 'does not' should be base form 'pay'. 'Lightful' is not a correct word; 'delightful' is appropriate. Also, the sentence is incomplete without 'it' at the end to specify what interest to improve.