学校— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer should be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating the location of your school, then add specific details without redundancy. Avoid filler words like 'I think' repeated unnecessarily. Also, correct the phrase 'a very good reputation International School' to 'a university with a very good reputation'.

示例: My school is the University of New South Wales (UNSW), located in Sydney. It is a large and well-reputed international university known for its diverse student body and strong academic programs.

建议: Try to avoid repetition and filler words like 'uh'. Begin with a clear statement of your opinion, then support it with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, use correct grammar such as 'a very big university' and 'I am studying my postgraduate degree here'.

示例: Yes, I like my school because UNSW is a very large university that offers excellent postgraduate programs. Moreover, I have gained a lot of practical knowledge and improved my personal skills during my studies here.

建议: Your answer is relevant but could be more coherent and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. For example, instead of repeating 'study space', use synonyms or restructure sentences. Also, ensure subject-verb agreement, e.g., 'there are many study spaces'.

示例: Yes, I believe UNSW is a great place to study because it offers numerous facilities such as libraries and quiet study areas. Additionally, each building has multiple study spaces, which makes it convenient for students to find a suitable place to focus.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence followed by specific details. Use correct plural forms and linking words. For example, mention the greenery and open spaces, then the availability of buildings for study and classes.

示例: The environment at UNSW is very pleasant, with many large outdoor areas filled with natural plants and greenery. Moreover, there are numerous buildings open to students for studying and attending classes, creating a comfortable atmosphere.

建议: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct statement about the importance of interest in study, then explain why with specific reasons. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'study four days themselves'. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: I believe that having an interest in studying is very important because it makes learning easier and more enjoyable. When students are interested, they are more motivated to study independently, which helps them learn more effectively.

× I'm currently a Postgres student at UNSW, so UNSW is a very good reputation International School I think and it is a big university in the Sydney I think.

✓ I'm currently a Postgraduate student at UNSW, so UNSW has a very good reputation as an international school, I think, and it is a big university in Sydney, I think.

The definite article 'the' before 'Sydney' is incorrect because 'Sydney' is a proper noun and does not require an article. Also, 'a very good reputation International School' is awkward; it should be 'has a very good reputation as an international school.' Additionally, 'Postgres' is likely a mispronunciation or typo for 'Postgraduate.'

× I like my school because the UNSW is very big university and I study my uh, Postgres degree in here.

✓ I like my school because UNSW is a very big university and I study my postgraduate degree here.

The definite article 'the' before 'UNSW' is unnecessary because UNSW is a proper noun. Also, 'very big university' needs the article 'a' before 'very big university.' The phrase 'in here' is better as 'here.' 'Postgres' should be 'postgraduate.'

× I learned lots of usable knowledge and uh, develop my uh, personal skill in here.

✓ I have learned lots of useful knowledge and developed my personal skills here.

The phrase 'in here' is better as 'here.' 'Usable knowledge' is better expressed as 'useful knowledge.' Also, the verb tense should be consistent; 'learned' and 'develop' should both be past tense or present perfect. 'Personal skill' should be plural 'personal skills.'

× I think UNSW is a good place to study because the school provides lots of study places in the campus like the library and also have the study space.

✓ I think UNSW is a good place to study because the school provides lots of study places on campus like the library and also has study spaces.

The phrase 'in the campus' should be 'on campus.' 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with the singular subject 'school.' 'The study space' should be plural 'study spaces' to match 'lots of.'

× Many study space in each building so it's a good places to study.

✓ There are many study spaces in each building, so it's a good place to study.

'Study space' should be plural 'study spaces' to match 'many.' 'It's a good places' is incorrect because 'it's' (it is) is singular and 'places' is plural; it should be 'a good place.' Also, the sentence needs 'There are' at the beginning for correct structure.

× So UNSW has lots of big outdoor everywhere plant, lots of art natural plants and also have lots of building is open for students to study and and class.

✓ So UNSW has lots of big outdoor plants everywhere, lots of natural plants, and also has lots of buildings open for students to study and attend classes.

'Outdoor everywhere plant' is awkward; it should be 'outdoor plants everywhere.' 'Art natural plants' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'natural plants.' 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject 'UNSW.' 'Building is open' should be 'buildings open.' 'And and class' should be 'and attend classes.'

× I think study should uh should not be a challenger or hard thing for students.

✓ I think studying should not be a challenge or a hard thing for students.

'Study' as a noun is better expressed as 'studying.' 'Challenger' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'challenge.' The modal verb 'should' is repeated unnecessarily.

× Only when students feel they are interested in studying, so the study will become more easier as they study four days themselves, so how much they learn they can get.

✓ Only when students feel interested in studying will studying become easier, and the more they study by themselves, the more they can learn.

The sentence structure is incorrect and confusing. 'More easier' is incorrect; 'easier' alone suffices. 'Study four days themselves' is unclear; likely intended 'study by themselves.' The sentence needs to be restructured for clarity and correct pronoun use.