学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时语法和表达有些错误，如“majoring in in”应为“majoring in”，“love develop products”应为“love developing products”，“user friendly products that is useful for human”应为“user-friendly products that are useful for people”。建议注意语法准确性和词汇搭配，同时回答可以更简洁自然。

示例: I am a senior university student majoring in Mechanical Industrial Design. I chose this major because I love developing products and designing user-friendly items that help people.

建议: 回答内容较丰富，但部分表达不够自然，如“a very top research and well known university”应为“a top research university”，“which is also a very modern and international city for my campus”表达不清晰。建议使用更地道的表达，避免重复“which is”。

示例: I study at Shanghai Jiao Tong University, a top research university located in Shanghai, a modern and international city. The campus is large and beautiful, with plenty of green spaces and excellent facilities.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误，如“prompt”应为“promotes”，“emerge myself”应为“immerse myself”。句子结构较复杂但表达不够清晰，建议简化句子并使用恰当的连接词，使表达更流畅自然。

示例: I think it's a great place to study because it promotes innovative projects and encourages research. Moreover, the supportive environment helps me stay focused and immerse myself in my interests.

建议: 回答表达重复且不够连贯，如“I want to study where I want the place where I study to be more open”重复且冗长。建议简化句子，使用连接词使逻辑更清晰，并具体说明如何开放能带来帮助。

示例: I would like my university to be more open to students from different fields because interacting with them can inspire innovation and help me develop interdisciplinary projects.

建议: 回答中存在重复“PhD PhD”，句子不完整且表达混乱，如“because I want to because”无意义。建议完整表达未来计划，避免重复，使用清晰的句子结构。

示例: I plan to pursue a PhD because I am passionate about research in medical equipment development and digital healthcare. I want to immerse myself in these fields to contribute to advancements in healthcare technology.

× I am a university student majoring in in Mechanical Industrial Design.

✓ I am a university student majoring in Mechanical Industrial Design.

句子中出现了重复的介词“in in”，应删除一个以符合英语语法规范。

× I choose this major not only because I love develop products but also design user friendly products that is useful for human.

✓ I choose this major not only because I love developing products but also designing user-friendly products that are useful for humans.

动词后应使用动名词形式，且“products”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”，此外“user friendly”应加连字符。

× I am now a senior student.

✓ I am now a senior student.

此句无语法错误，保持原句。

× I study at Shanghai Jiao Tong University, which is a very top research and well known university.

✓ I study at Shanghai Jiao Tong University, which is a top research and well-known university.

“very top”搭配不当，应直接用“top”；“well known”作为复合形容词应加连字符。

× The university is located in Shanghai, which is also a very modern and international city for my campus.

✓ The university is located in Shanghai, which is also a very modern and international city where my campus is located.

“for my campus”用法不当，应改为“where my campus is located”以表达正确的关系。

× It is very large and beautiful with green spaces and good facilities.

✓ It is very large and beautiful with green spaces and good facilities.

此句无语法错误，保持原句。

× I think it's a very good place to study.

✓ I think it's a very good place to study.

此句无语法错误，保持原句。

× It not only prompt innovative projects and encourage us to engage in research, but also its environment is very supportive, which is very focused and can motivate me to emerge myself into what I like.

✓ It not only prompts innovative projects and encourages us to engage in research, but its environment is also very supportive, which is very focused and can motivate me to immerse myself in what I like.

主语是单数，谓语动词应加-s；“but also its environment is”结构不当，应改为“but its environment is also”；“emerge myself”用词错误，应为“immerse myself”；“into”应改为“in”。

× Well, I want to study where I want the place where I study to be more open to students from different fields because I think it will help me to be more innovative and disciplinary for my own projects, because, for example, talk to others can help me.

✓ Well, I want the place where I study to be more open to students from different fields because I think it will help me to be more innovative and interdisciplinary in my own projects; for example, talking to others can help me.

句子结构重复且混乱，应简化；“disciplinary”用词错误，应为“interdisciplinary”；“talk to others”应改为动名词形式“talking to others”。

× For my study plans, I want to pursue a PhD PhD certification because I like to do research for the area like medical equipment development and digital healthcare.

✓ For my study plans, I want to pursue a PhD because I like to do research in areas like medical equipment development and digital healthcare.

“PhD PhD certification”重复，应删去一个“PhD”；“for the area like”搭配错误，应为“in areas like”。

× I want to emerge myself in these two areas because I want to because.

✓ I want to immerse myself in these two areas because I want to.

“emerge myself”用词错误，应为“immerse myself”；句尾“because”后无内容，应删去。