学习— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “I’m a student”), then add one or two specific details about what you study and why. Avoid unnecessary words and correct basic grammar (use prepositions and verb forms correctly).

示例: I’m a student. I’m studying English to prepare for a philosophy course at university, and I practise at home to improve my reading and writing skills.

建议: Answer directly with a clear sentence then add one specific detail (duration, focus, or method). Use correct tenses and avoid repetition. Link the detail with a simple connector like “and” or “so”.

示例: I study at a private English centre. I’ve been attending classes there for about seven months, and the lessons focus on speaking and test practice.

建议: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “so”). Keep sentences shorter and avoid filler words and repetition.

示例: Yes, it’s a good place to study because my English improves every day and the teachers emphasise communication skills. Therefore I feel more confident speaking in class.

建议: Start with a brief overall opinion, then give one clear suggestion with reasons. Use correct verb forms and linkers like “however” or “so” to present contrast and recommendation. Be specific about what should change.

示例: Overall it’s a good centre, but they focus too much on speaking. I suggest adding more structured writing classes so students can improve grammar and essay skills alongside speaking.

建议: Answer directly with a clear plan, then give one or two specific details (where, what degree, why). Use confident phrasing (avoid “maybe” if you have a plan) and correct word choices to express intentions and reasons.

示例: I plan to study philosophy abroad for my undergraduate degree, probably in the UK. I want to specialise in ethics because I enjoy discussing ideas and hope this will lead to academic opportunities.

× To be honest, I'm a student especially I'm studying English to prepare for philosophy course in bedroom. I have studied English well can have.

✓ To be honest, I'm a student. I'm studying English to prepare for a philosophy course at home. I have studied English as well as I can.

The original contains run-on sentences, missing articles, incorrect preposition and unclear phrasing. Split into separate sentences for clarity (sentence structure error). Add the article 'a' before 'philosophy course' and change 'in bedroom' to 'at home' or 'in my bedroom' (preposition and article). Replace 'I have studied English well can have' with 'I have studied English as well as I can' to convey ability correctly and use correct idiomatic expression.

× I just I just thought I studied in an English center. I have been studying it there about 7 months. I have at this course aggregate my English scores and.

✓ I studied at an English center. I have been studying there for about seven months. This course has helped improve my English scores.

The original repeats phrases and has incomplete, awkward clauses (sentence structure errors). Use 'studied at' instead of 'studied in' for the institution (preposition). Use 'for about seven months' for duration and write out 'seven' for formality. The final fragment is incomplete; rewrite to show cause and effect: 'This course has helped improve my English scores' using present perfect to show relevance to now.

× Posh yes, because I I feel my English improve every day and I have at my course I can communicate well in English and I find myself interested in English because the way they teach me and.

✓ Yes, because I feel my English improves every day. In my course I can communicate well in English, and I find myself interested in English because of the way they teach me.

The verb 'improve' must agree with singular subject 'my English' so use 'improves' (subject-verb agreement). Remove filler words and fix word order: 'In my course' rather than 'I have at my course'. Add 'because of' before 'the way they teach me' to use correct preposition and complete the clause.

× If if I have say something that I I had to say this is a good place.

✓ If I have something to say, this is a good place to express it.

Original is repetitive and ungrammatical (sentence structure). Use conditional 'If I have something to say' and complete with an appropriate clause 'this is a good place to express it' to make the meaning clear.

× To be honest, it's a good place to, uh, for students to study English. Uh, they are focused on too much focus on speaking too much. So I think they need to, uh, did the writing more, umm, that's it. The good way to balance, uh, between writing and speaking.

✓ To be honest, it's a good place for students to study English. They focus too much on speaking, so I think they need to do more writing. That would be a good way to balance writing and speaking.

Errors include awkward phrasing and incorrect verb form 'did' which should be 'do' (modal/verb usage). Remove redundant words. Use 'focus' as a present verb, and 'do more writing' instead of 'did the writing more'. Complete final sentence with 'That would be a good way to balance writing and speaking' for clarity.

× Maybe at this course I will study philosophy courses in a different nation and I I have I will give quite some happiness in my new new course.

✓ Maybe after this course I will study philosophy in a different country, and I think I will be quite happy in my new course.

Tense and word choice are awkward. Use 'after this course' rather than 'at this course' to indicate sequence. Use 'study philosophy in a different country' (country is more natural than 'nation'). Change 'I will give quite some happiness' to 'I will be quite happy' to use correct verb and expression for future feelings. Remove repeated words and fillers.